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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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199 words AcademicTask 1Bar Chart

Task 1

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Identify the category that dominates throughout: social welfare leads in all three years, reaching its highest figure in 2014.
Separate steady increases from fluctuating or recovering patterns: health and wildlife rise each year, whereas social welfare falls before rebounding.
Notice categories that finish at or near their starting values: education returns to 8, while environment ends at 7 compared with 8 initially.

Suggested structure

Introduce the chart by naming the measure, the six charity types and the 2012–2014 period.
Give an overview identifying the largest category and the broad direction of change.
Describe social welfare separately because its figures are much higher and fluctuate notably.
Group the remaining categories by pattern, comparing their starting, middle and final figures.
End with a concise comparison of which categories finished higher, level or lower than in 2012.

Useful vocabulary & examples

a steady upward path: A consistent increase across successive years.
Health followed a steady upward path, rising from 6 to 9.
fell before recovering: Decreased at first and then rose again.
Environment fell to 5 before recovering to 7.
returned to its starting figure: Ended at the same value as at the beginning.
Education returned to its starting figure of 8 in 2014.
edged up: Increased by a small amount.
Arts edged up from 3 to 4 in the final year.

Task Prompt

Task 1: The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 5.0

the chart above demonstrates the donation of a company given to six different types of charity from 2012 to 2014that overall, social welfare received most of the donation from the company, while, arts was the option to receive the least money from the donation from 2012 to 2014 the company donated in social welfare in 2012, at approximately 22, before dropping to 16 in 2013 and climbing to 24 in 2014. This category therefore remained the clear leader, and its 2014 figure was the highest on the chart. Education and the environment followed a similar pattern: donations to education were about 8, 6 and 8, while the corresponding figures for the environment were 8, 5 and 7. By contrast, health rose steadily, from 6 in 2012 to 7 in 2013 and 9 in 2014. Wildlife also increased each year, from roughly 3 to 4 and then 5. Arts received the smallest amounts overall, with approximately 3 in both 2012 and 2013, followed by 4 in 2014. In summary, social welfare dominated throughout, whereas the other five categories received substantially smaller donations. Most categories either recovered or grew by the final year, although education only returned to its 2012 level.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Rewrite the opening as two complete sentences: first paraphrase what the chart shows, then give the overview of the highest and lowest categories.

Check every figure against the chart and use a consistent format, such as “approximately 22 in 2012, 16 in 2013 and 24 in 2014.”

After drafting, scan for repeated uses of “donation” and replace some with precise alternatives such as “amount,” “figure” or “charity received.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

199

Type

Bar Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.5 Band

The overview identifies the key extremes: “social welfare received most” and “arts was the option to receive the least.” The continuation also covers all six categories and gives the main yearly values, including the rise in health. However, the overview is embedded in a run-on opening, and “most” could be made more precise by noting that social welfare led in every year. In a revision, state that comparison clearly, then select the main trends and figures.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The completed response eventually follows a useful sequence: social welfare, the two categories with similar patterns, then health, wildlife and arts. Phrases such as “By contrast” and “In summary” help signal relationships. The opening, however, runs “2014that overall” together and gives no clear sentence boundary, making the main overview difficult to follow. Separate the introduction and overview into complete sentences, then group comparisons consistently.

Lexical Resource

4.5 Band

There is some relevant chart language, including “climbing,” “rose steadily” and “increased each year,” which describes movement clearly. In contrast, the opening repeats “donation” several times and calls arts “the option to receive the least money,” an unnatural way to report a category’s figure. Use concise alternatives such as “the smallest amount” or “the lowest donations,” and avoid repeating the same noun in adjacent phrases.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.0 Band

The continuation includes accurate comparative structures, for example “from 6 in 2012 to 7 in 2013 and 9 in 2014.” The preserved opening has substantial sentence-boundary and word-form problems: “2014that overall” joins clauses without punctuation, while “while, arts” places a comma incorrectly. The phrase “donated in social welfare” also uses an unsuitable preposition. Practise editing the opening for full stops, articles and verb-preposition combinations.

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