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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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Task 1

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Ideas to explore

  • Compare the pace of adoption: refrigerator ownership rose especially quickly between 1940 and 1960, while washing-machine ownership changed more gradually.
  • Identify milestones in appliance ownership: refrigerators reached 100% by 1980, and vacuum cleaners did so by 2000.
  • Set the decline in housework hours alongside rising appliance ownership, while avoiding claims that the charts prove one trend caused the other.

Suggested structure

  1. Introduce both charts, the measures shown and the 1920–2019 period.
  2. Give an overview of the broad appliance-ownership increases and the fall in housework hours.
  3. Compare the three appliances, highlighting their starting points and the years they reached universal ownership.
  4. Describe the housework-hour decline chronologically, noting the plateau at 15 hours between 1980 and 2000.
Useful vocabulary & examples
household ownership
the proportion of households that have a particular item

Household ownership of refrigerators rose to 100% by 1980.

reach universal ownership
be owned by all households shown in the chart

Vacuum cleaners reached universal ownership in 2000.

edge down
decrease slightly

Washing-machine ownership edged down between 1960 and 1980.

remain at that level
stay unchanged at a previously stated figure

Housework time remained at 15 hours per week from 1980 to 2000.

Task Prompt

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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User Essay Analysis

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Band 4.0

The provided chart clearly depicts the modifications of the total duration consumed during dealing with variety of devices in homes plus the ownership of devices which rely on electricity between 11920 and 2019. It is obviously show that cooling device was fully unknown throughout early 20’s However it had a rapid increase of ownership in later years. Overall, the ownership of all three appliances went up, while the number of hours spent on housework went down. In 1920, washing machines were the most common appliance, at about 40% of households. Refrigerators were almost not used, but vacuum cleaners were found in around 30% of homes.

In 1940, washing machine ownership reached 60%, compared with about 50% for refrigerators and 40% for vacuum cleaners. By 1960, refrigerators had risen sharply to about 90%, and the other two appliances were close to 70%. Refrigerator ownership reached 100% in 1980 and stayed at this level. Vacuum cleaner ownership increased more slowly, reaching 100% by 2000 and remaining there in 2019. Washing machine ownership changed less, dipping slightly in 1980 before increasing to about 75% at the end.

Housework hours fell from 50 per week in 1920 to 20 in 1960. They then dropped to around 15 in 1980 and 2000, and about 10 in 2019. This show that appliances became more common as time for housework reduced.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
Replace the opening with a precise statement that the charts compare appliance ownership and weekly housework hours from 1920 to 2019.
2
Check every year against the plotted points; for example, refrigerators are at about 90% in 1960 and 100% from 1980 onward.
3
Proofread each sentence for subject–verb agreement and use the same unit when comparing housework hours.

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