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Task 1

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Compare the pace of adoption: refrigerator ownership rose especially quickly between 1940 and 1960, while washing-machine ownership changed more gradually.
Identify milestones in appliance ownership: refrigerators reached 100% by 1980, and vacuum cleaners did so by 2000.
Set the decline in housework hours alongside rising appliance ownership, while avoiding claims that the charts prove one trend caused the other.

Suggested structure

Introduce both charts, the measures shown and the 1920–2019 period.
Give an overview of the broad appliance-ownership increases and the fall in housework hours.
Compare the three appliances, highlighting their starting points and the years they reached universal ownership.
Describe the housework-hour decline chronologically, noting the plateau at 15 hours between 1980 and 2000.

Useful vocabulary & examples

household ownership: the proportion of households that have a particular item
Household ownership of refrigerators rose to 100% by 1980.
reach universal ownership: be owned by all households shown in the chart
Vacuum cleaners reached universal ownership in 2000.
edge down: decrease slightly
Washing-machine ownership edged down between 1960 and 1980.
remain at that level: stay unchanged at a previously stated figure
Housework time remained at 15 hours per week from 1980 to 2000.

Task Prompt

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 4.0

The provided line charts give statistical analysis about the alternation in possession of electronic gadgets as well as the quantity of time used for household chores in a specific nation from 1920 to 2019. Overall, the ownership of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners increased constantly and reached a peak in the final years while that of washing machines also went up, but it had a small fall in 1980. The hours of housework became much less over the period.

In 1920, washing machines were in 40% of homes, and vacuum cleaners were 30%, while refrigerators were almost not owned. By 1940, washing machine ownership was 60%, higher than vacuum cleaner ownership at 50% and refrigerator ownership near 50%. Refrigerator ownership then increased quickly to 90% in 1960 and 100% in 1980. Vacuum cleaner ownership also grew, reaching 70% in 1960, 90% in 1980 and all households by 2000. It stayed at 100% in 2019. Washing machine ownership was 70% in 1960, decreased to about 65% in 1980, then rose to 75% at the end.

The time for housework decreased from 50 hours per week in 1920 to 35 in 1940 and 20 in 1960. It went down to 15 in 1980, stayed the same in 2000 and finished at 10 hours in 2019.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Rewrite the overview to include both major patterns: appliance ownership generally rose, while weekly housework hours fell substantially.

Check every plotted year and compare the series accurately, especially the washing-machine dip from about 70% in 1960 to 65% in 1980.

Replace unnatural expressions such as “alternation in possession” with precise chart language, then proofread pronouns and comparisons for clear grammatical references.

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Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

212

Type

Multiple Graphs

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The completed response includes the main trends and many key figures, such as housework falling from “50 hours per week in 1920” to “10 hours in 2019.” It also reports the appliance ownership peaks. However, the overview focuses on appliance ownership and does not mention the sharp fall in housework time, an important overall feature. Add that contrast in the overview, and check that each comparison names the correct appliance.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The answer moves from an introduction and overview to appliance details and then housework figures, so the reader can follow its broad organisation. The phrase “The hours of housework became much less over the period” signals a relevant trend, but it is separated from the detailed housework paragraph and is quite general. Group each chart’s figures in a clear sequence and use concise links such as “By contrast” to connect the two overall trends.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

Some task-related vocabulary is used, including “ownership,” “increased,” and “decreased.” However, “alternation in possession” is an awkward and inaccurate choice for a change in ownership, while “electronic gadgets” is less precise than “electrical appliances.” Replace these expressions with common chart-reporting collocations, and vary repetition carefully—for example, use “the proportion of households” when referring to percentages.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.0 Band

The answer communicates several comparisons through simple sentences, for example, “It went down to 15 in 1980, stayed the same in 2000 and finished at 10 hours in 2019.” Some constructions are less controlled: “higher than vacuum cleaner ownership at 50%” needs an article or a plural noun for natural comparison, and “it had a small fall” has an unclear pronoun reference. Practise accurate comparative clauses and make the subject explicit when describing each change.

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