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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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Task 1

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Compare the pace of adoption: refrigerator ownership rose especially quickly between 1940 and 1960, while washing-machine ownership changed more gradually.
Identify milestones in appliance ownership: refrigerators reached 100% by 1980, and vacuum cleaners did so by 2000.
Set the decline in housework hours alongside rising appliance ownership, while avoiding claims that the charts prove one trend caused the other.

Suggested structure

Introduce both charts, the measures shown and the 1920–2019 period.
Give an overview of the broad appliance-ownership increases and the fall in housework hours.
Compare the three appliances, highlighting their starting points and the years they reached universal ownership.
Describe the housework-hour decline chronologically, noting the plateau at 15 hours between 1980 and 2000.

Useful vocabulary & examples

household ownership: the proportion of households that have a particular item
Household ownership of refrigerators rose to 100% by 1980.
reach universal ownership: be owned by all households shown in the chart
Vacuum cleaners reached universal ownership in 2000.
edge down: decrease slightly
Washing-machine ownership edged down between 1960 and 1980.
remain at that level: stay unchanged at a previously stated figure
Housework time remained at 15 hours per week from 1980 to 2000.

Task Prompt

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 6.0

The provided line graphs give information about the alterations in possession of household equipment as well as the quantity of time expended for household chores in a particular country from 1920 to 2019. Generally, the ownership of washing machines fluctuated throughout the given period, while those of vacuum cleaners and refrigerators reached their maximum volumes by 2000 and remained at 100% in 2019. Refrigerator ownership climbed from almost none in 1920 to 50% in 1940, then rose sharply to 90% in 1960 and reached 100% by 1980. Vacuum cleaner ownership increased more steadily, from 30% in 1920 to 50% in 1940 and 70% in 1960, before reaching 90% in 1980 and 100% in 2000. In contrast, washing-machine ownership started at 40% and rose to 60% in 1940 and 70% in 1960. It then slipped slightly to about 65% in 1980, before recovering to 70% in 2000 and 75% in 2019. Meanwhile, weekly housework time fell from 50 hours per household in 1920 to 35 in 1940 and 20 in 1960. It then declined to around 15 hours in 1980 and 2000, and approximately 10 hours by 2019. Overall, the charts show much wider access to appliances alongside a marked reduction in domestic work.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write a concise overview that contrasts the rise in appliance ownership with the fall in weekly housework hours, and note which appliances reached 100%.

Group the appliance comparisons by trend: refrigerators rose earliest, vacuum-cleaner ownership climbed steadily, and washing-machine ownership dipped slightly before recovering.

Use chart-focused collocations such as “ownership rose to,” “remained stable at” and “hours per household fell to,” and check that nouns match the data being measured.

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Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

203

Type

Multiple Graphs

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The overview identifies the two central patterns: appliance ownership generally rose, while time spent on housework declined. The answer also reports useful comparisons, including refrigerators reaching 100% by 1980 and housework dropping from 50 to about 10 hours. These figures align with the charts. For an even sharper report, make the opening overview distinguish the earlier lead in washing-machine ownership from the later near-universal ownership of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The answer moves from an overview to appliance details and then to housework, and transitions such as “In contrast” and “Meanwhile” help signal comparisons. The progression is easy to follow, although the appliance figures are presented in a fairly long sequence. A useful next step is to group the two appliances that reached 100% before discussing washing machines, then use a separate paragraph for the housework trend.

Lexical Resource

5.5 Band

There is relevant range in phrases such as “rose sharply,” “slipped slightly” and “declined,” which describe changing figures appropriately. However, “alterations in possession” and “quantity of time expended” sound unnecessarily formal and are less natural for describing charts. Prefer concise reporting language such as “changes in ownership” and “hours spent on housework,” while keeping precise verbs for rises, falls and stable periods.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The response uses both longer sentences and time clauses, as in “It then slipped slightly … before recovering,” and the numerical comparisons are generally expressed clearly. The opening phrase “those of vacuum cleaners and refrigerators” is grammatically possible but awkward after “ownership,” and “maximum volumes” is an imprecise noun choice. Use “ownership of vacuum cleaners and refrigerators” and “highest levels” to make the relationships clearer.

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