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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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169 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Compare the leading reason across both years: suitable degree courses ranked first, rising slightly from 35% to 37%.
Highlight the largest increase: choosing a university close to the parental home went from 10% to 22%.
Contrast the sharpest decline with the smaller fall: sports and social activities dropped from 19% to 6%, while quality of resources moved from 21% to 17%.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the chart topic and identify both years.
Give an overview of the top reason and the most notable increases and decreases.
Describe the 1987 figures, grouping the largest and smallest categories.
Compare the 2007 figures with 1987, using exact percentages and clear change language.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: made up a particular percentage or share
Suitable degree courses accounted for 35% of responses in 1987.
rose slightly: increased by a small amount
The share choosing suitable degree courses rose slightly to 37%.
increased considerably: grew by a noticeable amount
The proportion choosing a university close to home increased considerably, from 10% to 22%.
fell substantially: decreased by a large amount
Good sports and social activities fell substantially, from 19% to 6%.

Task Prompt

The charts below show the main reasons why students chose a particular university in the UK, in 1997 and 2007.

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Band 6.0

The pie charts below provides information about the major reasons why a certain university in the UK were chosen by students in the years 1997 and 2007 respectively. Overall, the suitable degree courses had the highest percentage of the main reasons in both years. as you can see in the charts, good sports and social activities were selected by 19% of students in the first chart, but this figure fell to 6% in 2007. Degree courses were the most common reason in both charts, rising slightly from 35% to 37%. The proportion choosing the university because it was close to their parental home increased considerably, from 10% to 22%. By contrast, the percentage citing quality of resources declined from 21% to 17%, while quality of teaching rose from 15% to 18%. Overall, the biggest change was the increased importance of living close to home and the reduced importance of sports and social activities. The task statement gives the first year as 1997, although the left-hand chart is labelled 1987.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace “the highest percentage of the main reasons” with a precise overview, such as “Degree courses were the most frequently cited reason in both charts.”

Group the figures by trend: discuss the three categories that rose together, then the two that fell, using percentage-point changes where useful.

Proofread the opening for subject–verb agreement and sentence capitalization; also flag the 1987/1997 label conflict clearly and briefly.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

169

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The response identifies degree courses as the leading reason and includes all five categories with accurate comparisons, for example, “from 10% to 22%” for proximity to home. It also notes the chart’s date discrepancy rather than silently treating the conflicting labels as consistent. However, the overview’s “highest percentage of the main reasons” is imprecise, and the opening sentence is awkward. Next, state the main trends directly and briefly explain the date conflict.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The answer moves from an overview to comparisons of individual categories, then summarizes the main changes. Transitions such as “By contrast” help distinguish increases from decreases. However, the lowercase “as you can see” begins a new sentence after a full stop, and the date clarification feels appended rather than integrated. Use clear paragraphs for the introduction/overview and data details, and place the chart-label note in a concise final sentence.

Lexical Resource

5.5 Band

The response uses relevant comparison language, including “declined,” “rose,” and “increased considerably,” and names each chart category accurately. Some expressions are unnatural or vague, especially “the suitable degree courses” and “the highest percentage of the main reasons.” The phrase “as you can see” is also conversational for this report. Use precise terms such as “share,” “proportion,” and “reason cited,” while retaining the chart’s category labels.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.0 Band

The comparisons use several correct past-tense forms, as in “this figure fell to 6%” and “quality of teaching rose.” However, the opening has subject–verb disagreement in “charts below provides” and an awkward passive construction in “university … were chosen by students.” The lowercase start “as you can see” after a full stop is also incorrect. Use “charts provide” and a direct construction such as “students chose,” then proofread sentence openings.

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