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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 9.0 Example

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212 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Agriculture is the largest global water-use sector across the displayed period, rising to about 3,000 km³ by 2000.
Industrial and domestic use both increase over time, but remain below agricultural use; industry ends at roughly 1,400 km³ and domestic use at about 500 km³.
In 2000, Brazil exceeds the Democratic Republic of Congo in population, irrigated land and per-person water consumption; the per-person figures are 359 m³ and 8 m³ respectively.

Suggested structure

Introduce the line graph and table, including their subject and time point.
Give an overview of the dominant global sector and the main country contrast.
Describe the global trend, comparing agriculture, industry and domestic use from the start to the end of the period.
Summarise the table by comparing population, irrigated land and per-person consumption.

Useful vocabulary & examples

per-person consumption: The amount used by each individual on average.
Per-person water consumption was 359 m³ in Brazil.
irrigated land: Land supplied with water artificially to support crop growth.
Brazil had 26,500 km² of irrigated land.
rose from … to …: A concise way to describe an increase between two figures.
Agricultural water use rose from about 500 km³ to approximately 3,000 km³.
remained the smallest category: Continued to be the lowest of the compared groups.
Domestic use remained the smallest category in the graph.

Task Prompt

The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

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Band 9.0

The graph and table provide information about global water usage by sector from 1900 to 2000, and the water consumption statistics for Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000. The graph illustrates the trends in water use across three sectors: agriculture, industrial, and domestic. Over the 20th century, agricultural water use consistently accounted for the largest share. Overall, water use rose in all three sectors, with agriculture remaining the biggest user throughout. The table also shows that Brazil had a larger population, more irrigated land and higher per-person water consumption than the Democratic Republic of Congo.

In 1900, agriculture used approximately 500 km³ of water, compared with around 100 km³ for industry and 50 km³ for domestic purposes. Agricultural use rose steadily before increasing more sharply from about 1950, reaching roughly 3,000 km³ by 2000. Industrial consumption also accelerated in the latter part of the period, ending at about 1,400 km³. Domestic use increased more gradually, to approximately 500 km³.

In 2000, Brazil had a population of 176 million and 26,500 km² of irrigated land. The corresponding figures for the Democratic Republic of Congo were 5.2 million people and 100 km². Per-person consumption was 359 m³ in Brazil, far above the 8 m³ recorded in Congo.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Make the overview contrast the three trends explicitly: agriculture is highest, industry rises substantially, and domestic use remains lowest.

Keep sector labels parallel throughout; check the preserved list and use “agriculture, industry, and domestic use.”

When describing the chart, group information by sector and include approximate values only at clear comparison points, such as the beginning and end of the period.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

9.0

Excellent

Words

212

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

8.0 Band

The response covers both visuals and identifies the main pattern: “agriculture remaining the biggest user throughout.” It also includes relevant start- and end-period comparisons and all three table measures for each country. The chart figures are presented as approximate, which suits visual estimates. A small refinement would be to make the overall comparison more explicitly contrast the steep rise in agriculture with the slower growth in domestic use.

Coherence & Cohesion

8.0 Band

The answer is easy to follow: it introduces the two visuals, gives an overview, describes the graph, and then turns to the country table. Phrases such as “Overall” and “In 2000” help signal these stages. The first paragraph could be more efficient because the second sentence lists the sectors before the overview repeats the key ranking; consider moving directly from the introduction to the summary of the main trends.

Lexical Resource

7.5 Band

There is useful task-specific wording, including “per-person water consumption,” “irrigated land,” and “increased more gradually.” The answer also distinguishes “agriculture,” “industry,” and “domestic purposes” in its data description. However, the preserved phrase “agriculture, industrial, and domestic” mixes a noun with adjectives. Use parallel sector labels, such as “agriculture, industry, and domestic use,” for clearer, more natural wording.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.5 Band

Most sentences use accurate comparison and time structures, as in “Brazil had a population of 176 million” and “ending at about 1,400 km³.” The main grammatical issue is the preserved list “agriculture, industrial, and domestic,” where the items are not grammatically parallel. Revising that list to use three consistent nouns or sector phrases would improve accuracy. The remaining sentence patterns are clear, with a useful mix of simple and complex forms.

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