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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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205 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Agriculture is the largest global water-use sector across the displayed period, rising to about 3,000 km³ by 2000.
Industrial and domestic use both increase over time, but remain below agricultural use; industry ends at roughly 1,400 km³ and domestic use at about 500 km³.
In 2000, Brazil exceeds the Democratic Republic of Congo in population, irrigated land and per-person water consumption; the per-person figures are 359 m³ and 8 m³ respectively.

Suggested structure

Introduce the line graph and table, including their subject and time point.
Give an overview of the dominant global sector and the main country contrast.
Describe the global trend, comparing agriculture, industry and domestic use from the start to the end of the period.
Summarise the table by comparing population, irrigated land and per-person consumption.

Useful vocabulary & examples

per-person consumption: The amount used by each individual on average.
Per-person water consumption was 359 m³ in Brazil.
irrigated land: Land supplied with water artificially to support crop growth.
Brazil had 26,500 km² of irrigated land.
rose from … to …: A concise way to describe an increase between two figures.
Agricultural water use rose from about 500 km³ to approximately 3,000 km³.
remained the smallest category: Continued to be the lowest of the compared groups.
Domestic use remained the smallest category in the graph.

Task Prompt

The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 4.0

The line graph compares the amount of usage of water globally in three sectors over a hundred year period, while the table illustrates the consumption of water by Brazil and Congo in he year 2000. Overall, it is seen clearly that there is increase in water use by all the sectors but agricultural sector stays the largest user throughout the period. In 1900, agriculture used about 500 km³ of water, and this figure increased to around 3,000 km³ in 2000. The rise was especially fast after about 1970. Industrial water use was much lower. It started at approximately 100 km³ and went up to about 1,400 km³ at the end of the period. Domestic use also rose, but it remained the smallest figure, increasing from about 50 km³ to around 500 km³.

The table shows that Brazil had a population of 176 million, while Congo had only 5.2 million people. Brazil also had much more irrigated land, at 26,500 km² compared with 100 km² in Congo. Water consumption per person was 359 m³ in Brazil, which was far higher than the 8 m³ recorded for Congo. Therefore, Brazil used more water per person and had a larger area of irrigated land.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write a one-sentence overview that states the three sectors all rose, agriculture remained highest, and domestic use was lowest.

Use approximate starting and ending figures for each line, then describe the most noticeable period of faster growth without adding unsupported values.

Proofread the introduction specifically for articles and spelling, including “the year” and “an increase,” and use a full stop to separate the overview from the details.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

205

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

4.0 Band

The answer covers both visuals and identifies the main pattern in “agricultural sector stays the largest user.” It also includes the key table comparisons for population, irrigated land and per-person use. However, the overview is grammatically unclear, and the figures are mostly listed without comparing the overall scale of the sectors. Next, make the overview a clear sentence and select a few figures that best demonstrate the main trends.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The response follows a sensible order: it describes the line graph first and then turns to the table, using “The table shows” as a clear transition. The sector details are presented in a broadly understandable sequence. However, the opening overview runs into the description without clear punctuation, and some comparisons are repetitive. Separate the overview from the details and group the table figures into a direct Brazil–Congo comparison.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

The answer uses relevant topic vocabulary, including “irrigated land,” “industrial water use” and “per person.” These terms help identify what each visual measures. Some phrases are awkward or imprecise, especially “amount of usage of water” and “it is seen clearly,” and “water use” is repeated often. Practise concise chart language such as “water consumption rose” and “the figure reached,” while keeping the meaning precise.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

3.5 Band

There are some understandable simple sentences, such as “The table shows that Brazil had a population of 176 million.” However, the preserved opening contains clear errors in “in he year 2000” and “there is increase,” and it omits an article in “agricultural sector.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention. Check articles, verb forms and complete clauses when proofreading, then read each sentence aloud to catch missing words.

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