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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 9.0 Example

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194 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Agriculture is the largest global water-use sector across the displayed period, rising to about 3,000 km³ by 2000.
Industrial and domestic use both increase over time, but remain below agricultural use; industry ends at roughly 1,400 km³ and domestic use at about 500 km³.
In 2000, Brazil exceeds the Democratic Republic of Congo in population, irrigated land and per-person water consumption; the per-person figures are 359 m³ and 8 m³ respectively.

Suggested structure

Introduce the line graph and table, including their subject and time point.
Give an overview of the dominant global sector and the main country contrast.
Describe the global trend, comparing agriculture, industry and domestic use from the start to the end of the period.
Summarise the table by comparing population, irrigated land and per-person consumption.

Useful vocabulary & examples

per-person consumption: The amount used by each individual on average.
Per-person water consumption was 359 m³ in Brazil.
irrigated land: Land supplied with water artificially to support crop growth.
Brazil had 26,500 km² of irrigated land.
rose from … to …: A concise way to describe an increase between two figures.
Agricultural water use rose from about 500 km³ to approximately 3,000 km³.
remained the smallest category: Continued to be the lowest of the compared groups.
Domestic use remained the smallest category in the graph.

Task Prompt

The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

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Band 9.0

The line chart illustrates the global water usage across three sectors: agriculture, industrial, and domestic. In addition, the table provides data on water needs specifically in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo. Overall, water usage from these three sectors has increased to varying extents over time. Notably, water consumption is significantly higher in Brazil than in the Democratic Republic of Congo on a per-person basis in 2000.

In the line chart, global agricultural use was highest throughout the period, rising from roughly 500 km³ in 1900 to about 3,000 km³ in 2000. It increased steadily at first, then grew more sharply from around the 1950s onward. Industrial and domestic use also rose, especially in the later decades, but remained much lower. By 2000, industrial use stood at approximately 1,300 km³, while domestic use was about 500 km³.

The table shows that Brazil had a population of 176 million, compared with 5.2 million in the Democratic Republic of Congo. Brazil also had far more irrigated land, at 26,500 km² versus 100 km². Its water consumption per person was 359 m³, whereas the corresponding figure for Congo was only 8 m³.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Make the overview name the dominant global pattern: agriculture is highest and rises most strongly across the period.

When describing the table, distinguish water consumption per person from total national water use; report the measure and unit explicitly.

Use parallel category labels throughout, such as “agriculture, industry and domestic use,” and vary repeated wording like “water usage.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

9.0

Excellent

Words

194

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

8.0 Band

The response covers both visuals and highlights the main contrast: agriculture leads global use, while Brazil’s per-person figure is much higher than Congo’s. It also reports the table’s population, irrigated-land and per-person figures accurately. The phrase “water needs specifically” is less precise because the table gives several measures, not only water needs. Next, describe the table as a comparison of the three measures it presents.

Coherence & Cohesion

8.0 Band

The answer moves clearly from an overview to the line chart and then the country comparison. The contrast signalled by “By 2000” helps orient the reader, and the table paragraph groups related figures together. The opening overview could more clearly preview the strongest chart pattern as well as the country contrast. Next, make the overview explicitly state that agriculture was the largest and fastest-growing sector.

Lexical Resource

7.0 Band

The response uses relevant terms such as “per-person basis,” “irrigated land” and “increased more sharply” to describe the data. However, “water usage” and “water use” recur, and “agriculture, industrial, and domestic” mixes a noun with adjectives. The meaning remains understandable, but more consistent category labels would be more precise. Next, use “agriculture, industry, and households/domestic use” consistently.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.0 Band

Most sentences are controlled, including the comparison “359 m³, whereas the corresponding figure for Congo was only 8 m³.” The main grammatical issue is the category list “agriculture, industrial, and domestic,” where “industrial” does not match the noun form of the other items. The prose also relies mainly on straightforward statement patterns. Next, correct the parallel list and combine comparisons using clauses such as “whereas” or “although.”

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