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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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185 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Agriculture is the largest global water-use sector across the displayed period, rising to about 3,000 km³ by 2000.
Industrial and domestic use both increase over time, but remain below agricultural use; industry ends at roughly 1,400 km³ and domestic use at about 500 km³.
In 2000, Brazil exceeds the Democratic Republic of Congo in population, irrigated land and per-person water consumption; the per-person figures are 359 m³ and 8 m³ respectively.

Suggested structure

Introduce the line graph and table, including their subject and time point.
Give an overview of the dominant global sector and the main country contrast.
Describe the global trend, comparing agriculture, industry and domestic use from the start to the end of the period.
Summarise the table by comparing population, irrigated land and per-person consumption.

Useful vocabulary & examples

per-person consumption: The amount used by each individual on average.
Per-person water consumption was 359 m³ in Brazil.
irrigated land: Land supplied with water artificially to support crop growth.
Brazil had 26,500 km² of irrigated land.
rose from … to …: A concise way to describe an increase between two figures.
Agricultural water use rose from about 500 km³ to approximately 3,000 km³.
remained the smallest category: Continued to be the lowest of the compared groups.
Domestic use remained the smallest category in the graph.

Task Prompt

The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

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Band 4.0

The line graph illustrates water consumption used in three different sectors from 1990 to 2000. The table provides information about water use in Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000. Overall, agriculture consumed far more water than the other two sectors, while water consumption increased in all three sectors. Brazil used water much bigger than the Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000, with 359 m³ per person compared with only 8 m³ in Congo. Brazil had a population of 176 million and 26,500 km² of irrigated land. In comparison, Congo had 5.2 million people and 100 km² of irrigated land.

Although the graph begins in 1900, not 1990, agriculture use was about 500 km³ at the start and rose to 3,000 km³ in 2000. Industrial use also increased, from about 100 km³ to around 1,400 km³. Domestic use was the lowest, growing from a small amount to about 500 km³. The increase became faster in the later decades, especially for agriculture. Overall, Brazil had much more irrigated land and higher water use per person than the Democratic Republic of Congo.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Verify the graph’s start and end years before drafting; this visual covers 1900–2000.

Compare the sectors with approximate figures and units: agriculture rises from about 500 to 3,000 km³, while domestic use remains the lowest.

For the table, compare like with like: state Brazil’s and Congo’s per-person use (359 m³ and 8 m³) and irrigated land (26,500 km² and 100 km²).

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

185

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

4.5 Band

The overview, “agriculture consumed far more water,” identifies a key feature, and the answer includes the table’s population, irrigated-land and per-person figures. However, “from 1990 to 2000” misstates the graph’s full period, which is 1900–2000, and the comparison “Brazil used water much bigger” is unclear. Next, check the graph’s start year and report the main comparisons in clear units.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The answer uses a helpful overview beginning “Overall” and separates the country comparison from the graph description. The sequence is generally understandable, but the table details and line-graph trends are not consistently grouped, and the repeated final summary adds little. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on global sector trends, and a paragraph comparing the two countries.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

Some task vocabulary is relevant and specific, including “irrigated land” and “per person,” and terms such as “agriculture” and “industrial use” distinguish the sectors. However, “water consumption used” is redundant, while “water much bigger” is not a natural way to compare amounts. Practise collocations such as “water use increased” and “used more water per person,” then use them to describe the figures precisely.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.0 Band

The response includes simple, mostly readable statements, such as “Brazil had a population of 176 million.” However, “Brazil used water much bigger than the Democratic Republic of Congo” has an incorrect comparison structure, and “Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo” omits the article in the country name. Practise comparative patterns such as “Brazil used more water per person than…” and check articles and sentence boundaries.

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