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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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209 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Agriculture is the largest global water-use sector across the displayed period, rising to about 3,000 km³ by 2000.
Industrial and domestic use both increase over time, but remain below agricultural use; industry ends at roughly 1,400 km³ and domestic use at about 500 km³.
In 2000, Brazil exceeds the Democratic Republic of Congo in population, irrigated land and per-person water consumption; the per-person figures are 359 m³ and 8 m³ respectively.

Suggested structure

Introduce the line graph and table, including their subject and time point.
Give an overview of the dominant global sector and the main country contrast.
Describe the global trend, comparing agriculture, industry and domestic use from the start to the end of the period.
Summarise the table by comparing population, irrigated land and per-person consumption.

Useful vocabulary & examples

per-person consumption: The amount used by each individual on average.
Per-person water consumption was 359 m³ in Brazil.
irrigated land: Land supplied with water artificially to support crop growth.
Brazil had 26,500 km² of irrigated land.
rose from … to …: A concise way to describe an increase between two figures.
Agricultural water use rose from about 500 km³ to approximately 3,000 km³.
remained the smallest category: Continued to be the lowest of the compared groups.
Domestic use remained the smallest category in the graph.

Task Prompt

The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

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Band 6.0

The given charts elucidate disparities in the usage of fresh-water worldwide for three main sectors, along with the total consumption of water in two specific geographical territories, namely Brazil and Congo, in the year of 2000. A broad examination of data reveals that the amount of water used for family units, industrial zones, and cultivation had grown substantially over the century. Agriculture was consistently the largest user, rising from about 500 km³ in 1900 to roughly 3,000 km³ in 2000. Industrial use also increased, particularly after 1950, reaching approximately 1,400 km³ by 2000. Domestic consumption remained the smallest category throughout, although it climbed from a very low starting point to around 500 km³ at the end. Overall, growth in all three sectors became more pronounced in the latter decades.

The table shows a marked contrast between Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo. Brazil had a population of 176 million, compared with 5.2 million in Congo. Its area of irrigated land was also much larger, at 26,500 km², while the figure for Congo was only 100 km². Water consumption per person followed the same pattern: 359 m³ in Brazil, compared with 8 m³ in Congo. Thus, Brazil had higher figures in all three measures shown.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write an overview that states both dominant patterns: agriculture used the most water globally, and Brazil exceeded Congo in each table measure.

Use the chart’s sector labels consistently—agriculture, industrial use, and domestic use—instead of paraphrases such as “family units” and “industrial zones.”

Check each comparison against the visual and include units with figures, such as km² for irrigated land and m³ for water consumption per person.

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Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

209

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The response covers both visuals and identifies the main trends: “Agriculture was consistently the largest user” and “Brazil had higher figures in all three measures shown.” It also includes the key comparisons from the table. However, the opening refers to “Congo” rather than naming the Democratic Republic of Congo in full, and the overview could more directly summarise the contrast between global sector growth and the country data. Next, make the overview concise and use the table’s full country name at first mention.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The answer is arranged logically: it describes the global trends first, then turns to the country table with “The table shows a marked contrast.” Comparisons within the second paragraph are easy to follow, especially the repeated Brazil–Congo contrasts. The opening is wordy, though, and the transition from global trends to the table could be sharper. Next, use a short overview after the introduction, then group the chart details and table comparisons in separate, focused paragraphs.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is useful range in phrases such as “consumption per person,” “irrigated land,” and “became more pronounced.” Some choices sound unnecessarily elaborate or imprecise: “specific geographical territories” is less natural than “countries,” and “family units” does not clearly label domestic water use. Next, favour established chart vocabulary such as “domestic use,” “global water consumption,” and “the amount of irrigated land,” while keeping the meaning precise.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.0 Band

The response uses a mix of longer and shorter sentences, and most comparisons are formed clearly, for example, “359 m³ in Brazil, compared with 8 m³ in Congo.” The opening has awkward phrasing in “in the year of 2000,” while “the amount of water used for family units, industrial zones, and cultivation had grown” is grammatically cumbersome because the categories are presented as users. Next, use a direct construction such as “Water use in all three sectors increased” and check article and preposition choices.

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