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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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229 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Agriculture is the largest global water-use sector across the displayed period, rising to about 3,000 km³ by 2000.
Industrial and domestic use both increase over time, but remain below agricultural use; industry ends at roughly 1,400 km³ and domestic use at about 500 km³.
In 2000, Brazil exceeds the Democratic Republic of Congo in population, irrigated land and per-person water consumption; the per-person figures are 359 m³ and 8 m³ respectively.

Suggested structure

Introduce the line graph and table, including their subject and time point.
Give an overview of the dominant global sector and the main country contrast.
Describe the global trend, comparing agriculture, industry and domestic use from the start to the end of the period.
Summarise the table by comparing population, irrigated land and per-person consumption.

Useful vocabulary & examples

per-person consumption: The amount used by each individual on average.
Per-person water consumption was 359 m³ in Brazil.
irrigated land: Land supplied with water artificially to support crop growth.
Brazil had 26,500 km² of irrigated land.
rose from … to …: A concise way to describe an increase between two figures.
Agricultural water use rose from about 500 km³ to approximately 3,000 km³.
remained the smallest category: Continued to be the lowest of the compared groups.
Domestic use remained the smallest category in the graph.

Task Prompt

The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

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Band 5.0

The graphs present figures about the usage of water around the world and its consumption in Brazil and Congo, as well as irrigated land and population. As observed from the line graph, each of the three sectors had a rise in ten-years period, especially agriculture sector. Meanwhile, the table shows that the use of water in Brazil was much higher per person than in the Democratic Republic of Congo. Brazil also had a much larger population and irrigated area.

Overall, agriculture was by far the largest user of water worldwide throughout 1900 to 2000, and all three sectors increased, with growth accelerating toward the end. Brazil's per-person consumption and irrigated area were substantially higher than Congo's, and its population was also much larger.

In 1900, global agricultural use was about 500 km³, compared with roughly 100 km³ for industry and around 50 km³ for domestic purposes. By 2000, these figures had risen to approximately 3,000, 1,400 and 500 km³ respectively. Agricultural use rose steadily, then more sharply after 1970. Industrial use also climbed, particularly in the final decades, while domestic use increased more gradually.

Brazil's population was 176 million, compared with 5.2 million in the Democratic Republic of Congo. Its irrigated land measured 26,500 km², far above Congo's 100 km². Water consumption per person was 359 m³ in Brazil, against only 8 m³ in Congo.

Targeted Improvement Tips

State the key overview immediately after the introduction: agriculture is the largest category throughout, and all three forms of use rise.

Use approximate figures only where the graph supports them, then compare the scale of growth across agriculture, industry and domestic use.

Check each noun phrase in the preserved opening for articles and form, especially “a 100-year period” and “the agricultural sector.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

229

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The response covers both visuals and identifies the main pattern: “agriculture was by far the largest user of water.” It also reports all three country comparisons, including population, irrigated land and per-person use. The sector values are presented as approximate, which suits the graph’s scale. For greater precision, make the century-long time frame explicit in the overview and briefly compare how much faster industrial use grew than domestic use.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.5 Band

The answer moves from the global trends to the country table, and the paragraph beginning “In 1900” gives the line graph a clear chronological structure. However, the opening paragraph introduces table details before the overview, so the focus shifts quickly. Organise the response as introduction, overview, global figures, then country comparisons; this would make the main message easier to locate and reduce the jump between visuals.

Lexical Resource

5.5 Band

Useful task vocabulary includes “irrigated area,” “per-person consumption” and “domestic use,” and the answer distinguishes the three sectors. Some wording is less natural or precise: “usage of water” is wordier than “water use,” and “Congo” is less specific than the table’s country name. Prefer concise collocations such as “water consumption” and use “the Democratic Republic of Congo” consistently.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.0 Band

The response uses several sentence types and handles comparisons such as “compared with 5.2 million” clearly. The preserved phrases “in ten-years period” and “especially agriculture sector” have missing or incorrect grammatical forms, and “toward the end” could be made more precise with a stated time reference. Check articles, prepositions and singular/plural forms during revision, while retaining the clear past-tense reporting in the data paragraphs.

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