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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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213 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Agriculture is the largest global water-use sector across the displayed period, rising to about 3,000 km³ by 2000.
Industrial and domestic use both increase over time, but remain below agricultural use; industry ends at roughly 1,400 km³ and domestic use at about 500 km³.
In 2000, Brazil exceeds the Democratic Republic of Congo in population, irrigated land and per-person water consumption; the per-person figures are 359 m³ and 8 m³ respectively.

Suggested structure

Introduce the line graph and table, including their subject and time point.
Give an overview of the dominant global sector and the main country contrast.
Describe the global trend, comparing agriculture, industry and domestic use from the start to the end of the period.
Summarise the table by comparing population, irrigated land and per-person consumption.

Useful vocabulary & examples

per-person consumption: The amount used by each individual on average.
Per-person water consumption was 359 m³ in Brazil.
irrigated land: Land supplied with water artificially to support crop growth.
Brazil had 26,500 km² of irrigated land.
rose from … to …: A concise way to describe an increase between two figures.
Agricultural water use rose from about 500 km³ to approximately 3,000 km³.
remained the smallest category: Continued to be the lowest of the compared groups.
Domestic use remained the smallest category in the graph.

Task Prompt

The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 6.0

The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo. It is clear that global water needs rose significantly over the period show and agriculture accounted for the largest proportion of the water used. We can also see that agriculture remained by far the biggest user throughout, while domestic use was the smallest. In 1900, agriculture used about 500 km³, compared with roughly 100 km³ for industry and around 50 km³ for homes. By 2000, these figures had climbed to approximately 3,000, 1,400 and 500 km³ respectively. All three sectors increased, especially after the 1960s, and the gap between agriculture and the other uses became wider.

The table shows large differences between the two countries in 2000. Brazil had a population of 176 million, compared with just 5.2 million in the Democratic Republic of Congo. Brazil also had 26,500 km² of irrigated land, whereas Congo had only 100 km². Water consumption per person was much higher in Brazil, at 359 m³, while the figure for Congo was 8 m³. Overall, Brazil exceeded Congo on all three measures, although the largest population difference was not as great as the contrast in per-person consumption.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Correct the phrase “period show” to “period shown” and check participles and verb forms during proofreading.

Avoid repeating the agriculture overview: state the main trend once, then use the chart paragraph to compare the start and end of the period.

Make the country comparisons more prominent by grouping population, irrigated land and per-person consumption into clear paired contrasts.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

213

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The answer covers both visuals and gives a clear overview: “agriculture remained by far the biggest user throughout, while domestic use was the smallest.” It also compares all three table measures and includes the visible figures. The final comparison about the population gap is less informative than the main contrasts. To strengthen the report, prioritise the most striking comparisons and keep approximate chart values clearly tied to the relevant years.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The answer moves logically from the global line chart to the country table, and the paragraph break makes that change easy to follow. Phrases such as “By 2000” and “The table shows” help signal the sequence. However, the overview is repeated in “agriculture accounted for the largest proportion” and “agriculture remained by far the biggest user.” Combine these into one concise overview, then use the remaining space for comparisons.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is useful task vocabulary, including “irrigated land,” “domestic use” and “water consumption per person,” and the answer varies comparison language with “whereas” and “compared with.” Some wording is repetitive, particularly “used” and “water,” while “global water needs” is less precise than describing water consumption. Next, use a few accurate alternatives such as “consumption” or “figure,” without replacing technical terms where precision matters.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

Most comparisons use clear sentence structures, for example, “Brazil had a population of 176 million, compared with just 5.2 million.” However, the preserved phrase “over the period show” contains a subject–verb/form error; it should be “over the period shown.” The answer also relies mainly on straightforward sentence patterns. Proofread participles and add a controlled complex sentence to compare the two countries’ measures.

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