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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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205 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Agriculture is the largest global water-use sector across the displayed period, rising to about 3,000 km³ by 2000.
Industrial and domestic use both increase over time, but remain below agricultural use; industry ends at roughly 1,400 km³ and domestic use at about 500 km³.
In 2000, Brazil exceeds the Democratic Republic of Congo in population, irrigated land and per-person water consumption; the per-person figures are 359 m³ and 8 m³ respectively.

Suggested structure

Introduce the line graph and table, including their subject and time point.
Give an overview of the dominant global sector and the main country contrast.
Describe the global trend, comparing agriculture, industry and domestic use from the start to the end of the period.
Summarise the table by comparing population, irrigated land and per-person consumption.

Useful vocabulary & examples

per-person consumption: The amount used by each individual on average.
Per-person water consumption was 359 m³ in Brazil.
irrigated land: Land supplied with water artificially to support crop growth.
Brazil had 26,500 km² of irrigated land.
rose from … to …: A concise way to describe an increase between two figures.
Agricultural water use rose from about 500 km³ to approximately 3,000 km³.
remained the smallest category: Continued to be the lowest of the compared groups.
Domestic use remained the smallest category in the graph.

Task Prompt

The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 5.0

The line graph illustrates use of water in the world, while the table shows information about water consuming in Brazil and in the Democratic Republic of Congo. Overall, water use increased in all sectors. It is noticeable that using water for agricultural purposes was always the main feature with an astonishing rise during the given period. Agriculture rose from about 500 km³ in 1900 to 3,000 km³ in 2000, with particularly rapid growth after 1970. Industrial consumption also climbed, from roughly 100 km³ to around 1,400 km³, while domestic use remained the smallest category, increasing from about 50 to 500 km³. In all three sectors, the upward trend continued across the century, although the gap between agriculture and the other uses became wider.

The table compares Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000. Brazil had a population of 176 million, compared with just 5.2 million in Congo. It also had far more irrigated land, at 26,500 km² versus 100 km². Water consumption per person was much higher in Brazil, at 359 m³, while the figure for Congo was only 8 m³. Thus, Brazil led in each of the three measures shown, with the largest contrast in per-person water use.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace “water consuming” with “water consumption,” and check noun forms in phrases such as “information about …”.

Make the overview compare both visuals: mention the overall rise in global use and Brazil’s much higher figures than Congo’s.

Use approximate figures consistently and describe the trends neutrally, for example, “rose sharply” rather than “an astonishing rise.”

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Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

205

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.5 Band

The response covers both visuals and identifies the main trends, including that agriculture was the largest category and that Brazil’s table figures exceeded Congo’s. It also includes key values such as “3,000 km³ in 2000” and “359 m³.” However, “an astonishing rise” is vague, and the overview could more clearly summarise the table’s contrast. Next, state the main comparisons in the overview and use measured language for trends.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.5 Band

The information follows a sensible order: an overview and graph details are followed by the country comparison. The transition “The table compares Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000” clearly signals the change of visual. Some ideas are crowded into long sentences, and the overview largely repeats the graph’s trend. Next, separate the overview from supporting figures and group the two visuals into distinct paragraphs.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

There is useful task vocabulary, including “irrigated land,” “Industrial consumption,” and “per person,” and the answer distinguishes the three sectors. However, “water consuming” is an incorrect word form, while “main feature” is imprecise for a chart category. “Astonishing rise” is also less suitably neutral than a factual description. Next, practise accurate collocations such as “water consumption” and “the largest category.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.0 Band

The answer uses a mix of simple and more extended structures, such as “although the gap between agriculture and the other uses became wider.” Most numerical comparisons are expressed clearly. There is a grammatical word-form problem in “information about water consuming,” and “using water for agricultural purposes was always the main feature” is an awkward construction. Next, check noun forms after prepositions and use concise subject–verb structures to report trends.

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