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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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205 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Agriculture is the largest global water-use sector across the displayed period, rising to about 3,000 km³ by 2000.
Industrial and domestic use both increase over time, but remain below agricultural use; industry ends at roughly 1,400 km³ and domestic use at about 500 km³.
In 2000, Brazil exceeds the Democratic Republic of Congo in population, irrigated land and per-person water consumption; the per-person figures are 359 m³ and 8 m³ respectively.

Suggested structure

Introduce the line graph and table, including their subject and time point.
Give an overview of the dominant global sector and the main country contrast.
Describe the global trend, comparing agriculture, industry and domestic use from the start to the end of the period.
Summarise the table by comparing population, irrigated land and per-person consumption.

Useful vocabulary & examples

per-person consumption: The amount used by each individual on average.
Per-person water consumption was 359 m³ in Brazil.
irrigated land: Land supplied with water artificially to support crop growth.
Brazil had 26,500 km² of irrigated land.
rose from … to …: A concise way to describe an increase between two figures.
Agricultural water use rose from about 500 km³ to approximately 3,000 km³.
remained the smallest category: Continued to be the lowest of the compared groups.
Domestic use remained the smallest category in the graph.

Task Prompt

The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The line chart and the table compare the data about the amount of water worldwide used by three sectors from 1990 to 2000 and water consumption in two counties namely Brazil and Congo in 2000. It is noticeable that the demand for usage of water worldwide increased in three sectors.In addition, agriculture accounted for the largest volume throughout the period, climbing from about 500 km³ in 1900 to 3,000 km³ in 2000. Industrial use also rose substantially, particularly after 1950, and reached approximately 1,400 km³ by the end. Domestic consumption increased more gradually, from a very low starting point to around 500 km³ in 2000. Thus, agriculture remained the biggest user, while homes used the least water in every year shown.

The table highlights a strong contrast between Brazil and Congo. Brazil had a population of 176 million, compared with just 5.2 million in the Democratic Republic of Congo. It also had far more irrigated land, at 26,500 km² versus 100 km². Water consumption per person was much higher in Brazil, at 359 m³, whereas the figure for Congo was only 8 m³. Overall, the table shows Brazil ahead on all three measures, especially individual water consumption and irrigated area.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Check the visual’s axes before drafting: describe the line chart as covering 1900–2000, and reserve 2000 for the table comparison.

Write a one-sentence overview that identifies agriculture as the largest user and notes that all three sectors increased; then give approximate start and end values.

Proofread the opening for precise country names, correct word forms such as “countries,” and spaces after full stops.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

205

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The response selects the main patterns and supports them with figures, including agriculture rising to “3,000 km³” and Brazil’s per-person use of “359 m³.” However, the opening gives the chart period as “1990 to 2000,” although the chart covers 1900 to 2000, and calls the countries “counties.” Correct the time span and name the Democratic Republic of Congo accurately in the overview so the data description is dependable.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The answer moves from an overview of the global trends to the line-chart details and then to the country comparison, making the information easy to follow overall. The contrast between Brazil and Congo is clearly signalled by “The table highlights a strong contrast.” The missing space in “sectors.In addition” interrupts the opening, and the overview could be more focused. Separate the sentences and state the dominant trends before adding detail.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is useful task-specific vocabulary in phrases such as “irrigated land,” “per person,” and “increased more gradually,” and the response distinguishes the three sectors. Some wording is unnecessarily awkward: “the demand for usage of water” is less natural than “global water use,” while “counties” is the wrong word for the places compared. Prefer concise, accurate collocations and use the chart’s sector labels consistently.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The continuation uses several clear sentence patterns, including the comparison “whereas the figure for Congo was only 8 m³.” In the preserved opening, “sectors.In addition” lacks a space after the full stop, and “two counties namely” has a word-choice and punctuation problem. Review sentence boundaries and commas around introductory or naming phrases; then proofread the opening separately, where these errors are concentrated.

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