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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 8.0 Example

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186 words AcademicTask 1Table

Task 1

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Agriculture is the largest global water-use sector across the displayed period, rising to about 3,000 km³ by 2000.
Industrial and domestic use both increase over time, but remain below agricultural use; industry ends at roughly 1,400 km³ and domestic use at about 500 km³.
In 2000, Brazil exceeds the Democratic Republic of Congo in population, irrigated land and per-person water consumption; the per-person figures are 359 m³ and 8 m³ respectively.

Suggested structure

Introduce the line graph and table, including their subject and time point.
Give an overview of the dominant global sector and the main country contrast.
Describe the global trend, comparing agriculture, industry and domestic use from the start to the end of the period.
Summarise the table by comparing population, irrigated land and per-person consumption.

Useful vocabulary & examples

per-person consumption: The amount used by each individual on average.
Per-person water consumption was 359 m³ in Brazil.
irrigated land: Land supplied with water artificially to support crop growth.
Brazil had 26,500 km² of irrigated land.
rose from … to …: A concise way to describe an increase between two figures.
Agricultural water use rose from about 500 km³ to approximately 3,000 km³.
remained the smallest category: Continued to be the lowest of the compared groups.
Domestic use remained the smallest category in the graph.

Task Prompt

The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

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Band 8.0

The provided line chart illustrates the global water usage by three different sectors from 1900 to 2000, whilst the table shows the water consumption per person in Brazil and Congo in 2000. Overall, after analyzing the charts, it can be observed that there was a significant increase in global water usage by the agriculture sector. Agriculture began at approximately 500 km³ in 1900 and climbed steadily, reaching about 3,000 km³ by 2000. Its upward trend became particularly sharp after 1950. Industrial use also rose, from roughly 100 km³ to around 1,400 km³, while domestic use increased more modestly, from about 50 to 500 km³. Thus, agriculture remained by far the largest user throughout, and the gap between it and the other sectors widened.

The table highlights marked differences between Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000. Brazil had a population of 176 million, compared with 5.2 million in Congo, and 26,500 km² of irrigated land, versus just 100 km². Per-person water consumption was also much higher in Brazil, at 359 m³, whereas the figure for Congo was only 8 m³.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Revise the overview to mention the shared direction of change across all three sectors, while noting that agriculture remained dominant.

Group the graph figures into one comparison sentence and use approximate language for values read from the plotted lines.

Replace padded reporting expressions such as “after analyzing the charts, it can be observed” with direct statements, then check for repeated uses of “water usage.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

8.0

Excellent

Words

186

Type

Table

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.5 Band

The response covers both visuals and identifies the main trend: agriculture was the largest user and rose to about 3,000 km³. It also compares the countries using all three table measures, including 359 m³ versus 8 m³ per person. The figures are presented as approximate where read from the graph. For a sharper overview, state explicitly that all three sectors increased, not only agriculture.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.5 Band

The answer moves logically from an introduction and overall statement to the graph details, then to the country table. Phrases such as “while domestic use increased more modestly” make the sector comparison easy to follow, and “The table highlights” clearly signals a change of visual. A useful refinement would be to keep the overview concise and reserve the detailed comparisons for the body paragraphs.

Lexical Resource

7.0 Band

Vocabulary is generally appropriate and varied: “climbed steadily,” “increased more modestly,” and “marked differences” accurately describe trends and contrasts. Some wording is less economical, especially “after analyzing the charts, it can be observed,” and “water usage” is repeated. Consider using concise reporting language such as “the charts show” and varying terms with “consumption” or “use” where suitable.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.0 Band

The response uses a good range of structures, including comparisons (“compared with 5.2 million”) and contrast clauses introduced by “while” and “whereas.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are controlled, and the opening “whilst” clause is grammatically sound. There is no major grammatical error to correct; as a refinement, simplify the passive-sounding phrase “it can be observed that” into a direct clause.

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