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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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Task 1

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Trace how the western side changed from houses and farmland to a car park and sports field, then to an expanded car park and smaller sports field.
Note that the science block appears by 1980, while the main school building stays in the northeastern area.
Identify features that remain broadly stable across the maps, including the main road along the northern boundary and the playground in the southeast.

Suggested structure

Introduce the dates and identify the maps as changes to the school site.
Give an overview of the main redevelopment and the features that remain.
Describe the 1950 layout using clear directional references.
Compare the main additions and replacements in 1980 and 2010.
End with the most notable change, such as the car park’s expansion and the sports field’s reduction.

Useful vocabulary & examples

occupy the western side: be located across the western part of a site
By 2010, the car park occupied most of the western side.
be replaced by: be removed and have something else put in its place
The houses and farmland were replaced by facilities for parking and sport.
expand southwards: increase in size toward the south
The car park expanded southwards between 1980 and 2010.
remain in the northeastern area: stay broadly in the northeast part of a location
The main school building remained in the northeastern area of the site.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West park secondary school since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons while relevant.

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Band 7.0

The diagrams give information about the construction of buildings in West Park Secondary school from the period of 1950 to 2010. Firstly, the school (main building) throughout the period remained unchanged. In contrast, from the period 1950 to 1980, houses and farmland completely disappeared from the map. Secondly, if we observe the two diagrams of the site, further changes can be seen by 2010. Overall, the school’s main building and playground remained in the same eastern parts of the site, while the surrounding land was substantially redeveloped. By 1980, the houses on the north-west side and the farmland to the south-west had been removed. A car park occupied the north-western area, a science block was built between it and the school, and a sports field replaced the farmland. The main building remained in the north-east, with the playground directly south of it. By 2010, the car park extended along the western side of the site, while the sports field was relocated to the southern centre, between the car park and playground. The science block remained immediately west of the main building. Thus, the principal change was the replacement of housing and farmland with facilities for parking, science and sport, while the school and playground were retained.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the opening phrase “construction of buildings” with a concise description of the site’s changes, then state the main overall pattern before listing details.

Use one consistent spatial framework—such as north, south, east and west—to make the locations of the car park, science block, sports field and playground easy to compare.

Review time phrases and sentence subjects: use “between 1950 and 2010,” and name the feature directly instead of using parenthetical labels.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

206

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The response covers the main transitions, including that the “main building remained in the north-east” and that housing and farmland were replaced by facilities. It also compares the 1980 and 2010 layouts. However, the opening describes “the construction of buildings,” which does not clearly frame the maps as changes to the whole site. Make the overall pattern explicit immediately after the introduction, then select the most important changes.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The answer moves chronologically from 1950 to 1980 and then 2010, and phrases such as “By 1980” and “By 2010” help readers follow the sequence. The transition “Secondly, if we observe” is less direct than the later map descriptions, and the overview comes after this transition. Put a concise overall comparison before the year-by-year details, then group locations consistently by area or feature.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

Useful map language includes “replaced,” “relocated,” and “extended along the western side,” which describes changes more precisely than repeatedly saying that features changed. In contrast, “construction of buildings” is an imprecise description of the maps, and “from the period” is unnecessarily wordy. Prefer concise terms such as “redevelopment,” “remained,” and “was replaced by,” choosing only descriptions supported by the diagrams.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The continuation uses clear past-tense clauses, for example, “the sports field was relocated,” and mostly handles longer sentences successfully. The preserved opening has less natural phrasing in “from the period of 1950 to 2010” and “the school (main building) throughout the period remained unchanged.” Rewrite these as direct subject–verb sentences and avoid the parenthesis; check that every sentence has a clear main clause.

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