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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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220 words AcademicTask 1Map

Task 1

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Trace how the western side changed from houses and farmland to a car park and sports field, then to an expanded car park and smaller sports field.
Note that the science block appears by 1980, while the main school building stays in the northeastern area.
Identify features that remain broadly stable across the maps, including the main road along the northern boundary and the playground in the southeast.

Suggested structure

Introduce the dates and identify the maps as changes to the school site.
Give an overview of the main redevelopment and the features that remain.
Describe the 1950 layout using clear directional references.
Compare the main additions and replacements in 1980 and 2010.
End with the most notable change, such as the car park’s expansion and the sports field’s reduction.

Useful vocabulary & examples

occupy the western side: be located across the western part of a site
By 2010, the car park occupied most of the western side.
be replaced by: be removed and have something else put in its place
The houses and farmland were replaced by facilities for parking and sport.
expand southwards: increase in size toward the south
The car park expanded southwards between 1980 and 2010.
remain in the northeastern area: stay broadly in the northeast part of a location
The main school building remained in the northeastern area of the site.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West park secondary school since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons while relevant.

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Band 7.0

The pictures illustrate how some areas changed at West Park Secondary School between 1950 and 2010. The most noticeable change was just south of the school, such as houses, a playground, a sports field, and a car park. First above, in 1950 there were some point areas in Secondary Schools consisting of houses to the left of the school, alongside the main road. Farmland covered the southwest portion, while a playground was located in the southeast. By 1980, the houses and farmland had disappeared. The school building was in the northeast, and a science block had been added immediately to its west. The former farmland area was divided between a sports field in the southwest and a car park in the northwest; the playground remained in the southeast.

In 2010, the overall layout was broadly similar to that of 1980, although some facilities had been rearranged. The car park occupied most of the western side, extending from the road towards the southern boundary. The science block stood to its east, beside the main school building. The sports field was moved to a smaller area near the centre of the southern edge, while the playground remained in the southeast. Overall, the site changed from having houses and farmland to containing more school facilities, while the playground stayed in the same area.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the unclear opening overview with one sentence stating the main transformation: houses and farmland gave way to additional school and parking facilities, while the playground remained.

Compare the layout by year and location: describe the western side, the school buildings, and the southern areas using consistent terms such as northwest and southeast.

Before finishing, check every example list and time marker for natural grammar; in particular, avoid “such as” after a clause that does not grammatically introduce examples.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

220

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The answer covers all three years and identifies the main changes, including that “the playground remained in the southeast” and that houses and farmland disappeared. It also gives an overall comparison. However, the opening description “The most noticeable change was just south of the school” is unclear and not fully accurate for features spread across the site. Next, state the broad transformation in a clear overview, then compare locations across the years.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The sequence moves from 1950 to 1980 and then 2010, and time markers such as “By 1980” make the comparisons easy to follow. The final overview also provides closure. However, “First above” disrupts the opening, and the initial list does not clearly organise features by location or year. Use a brief overview followed by chronological paragraphs grouped by areas of the map.

Lexical Resource

5.5 Band

Useful location language includes “immediately to its west,” “in the northwest,” and “near the centre of the southern edge.” These phrases help describe the map precisely. However, “some point areas” and “First above” are inappropriate or unclear choices, and “noticeable change” is followed by a list of features rather than a clear description of change. Practise accurate map terms such as “was replaced by,” “remained,” and “was relocated.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The answer includes accurate complex structures, for example, “although some facilities had been rearranged” and “while the playground remained in the southeast.” However, “The most noticeable change was just south of the school, such as…” has an awkward grammatical relationship between the subject and examples, and “First above” is not a natural sentence opener. Review how to introduce examples with “including” and check that each clause expresses a complete, logical relationship.

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