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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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Task 1

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Trace how the western side changed from houses and farmland to a car park and sports field, then to an expanded car park and smaller sports field.
Note that the science block appears by 1980, while the main school building stays in the northeastern area.
Identify features that remain broadly stable across the maps, including the main road along the northern boundary and the playground in the southeast.

Suggested structure

Introduce the dates and identify the maps as changes to the school site.
Give an overview of the main redevelopment and the features that remain.
Describe the 1950 layout using clear directional references.
Compare the main additions and replacements in 1980 and 2010.
End with the most notable change, such as the car park’s expansion and the sports field’s reduction.

Useful vocabulary & examples

occupy the western side: be located across the western part of a site
By 2010, the car park occupied most of the western side.
be replaced by: be removed and have something else put in its place
The houses and farmland were replaced by facilities for parking and sport.
expand southwards: increase in size toward the south
The car park expanded southwards between 1980 and 2010.
remain in the northeastern area: stay broadly in the northeast part of a location
The main school building remained in the northeastern area of the site.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West park secondary school since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons while relevant.

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Band 6.0

The maps illustrate how West Park Secondary School has transformed over time, 1950, 1980, and 2010. Overall, it can be seen that the school had undergone some significant changes over this period with the expansion of the school building, as well as the addition of sports field and car park. From the diagrams, the first map shows the site in 1950, when houses occupied the north-west corner, farmland lay directly below them, and the school and playground were on the eastern side. The school was in the north-east, with the playground to its south. By 1980, the houses and farmland had disappeared. A car park was built in the north-west, while a science block was added between it and the main school building. The sports field took up the south-west area, and the playground remained in the south-east. In 2010, the science block and main school building were still along the northern part of the site, although the science block was positioned to the left of the main building. The car park had expanded considerably, covering most of the western side and extending into the south. The sports field had become a narrow area near the lower middle, while the playground continued to occupy the south-east corner.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Rewrite the overview to name the two biggest changes directly: the replacement of houses and farmland, and the later growth of the car park.

Check every singular countable facility name in the opening and add an article where needed, such as “a sports field” and “a car park.”

Use one consistent spatial route for each date—north to south, then west to east—to reduce repetition and make comparisons easier to track.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

207

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The completed response covers all three dates and reports the main transformations, including the disappearance of the houses and farmland and the later expansion of the car park. The comparisons between the 1980 and 2010 layouts are useful. The overview, however, refers generally to “significant changes” rather than clearly foregrounding the removal of the original land uses and the changing size and position of facilities. State those key changes explicitly in the overview.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The response follows a clear chronological sequence: “in 1950,” “By 1980,” and “In 2010.” This makes the map changes easy to follow, and the location descriptions help orient the reader. Some details repeat between the opening overview and the year-by-year account. A useful next step is to keep the overview to two major patterns, then group each map’s remaining details by north/south or east/west.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is relevant map vocabulary in phrases such as “occupied the north-west corner,” “had disappeared,” and “expanded considerably.” These choices describe both location and change clearly. Some wording is less precise or natural, including “transformed over time, 1950, 1980, and 2010” and “sports field.” Use a more direct time phrase and include the articles needed with singular countable facility names.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The completed response uses a range of structures, including time clauses (“when houses occupied…”) and past perfect forms (“had disappeared”). However, the opening contains grammatical issues in “over time, 1950, 1980, and 2010” and “the addition of sports field and car park.” Review punctuation around time expressions and article use. Proofread the overview separately, then check that verb tenses consistently describe changes shown across past dates.

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