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Task 1

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Trace how the western side changed from houses and farmland to a car park and sports field, then to an expanded car park and smaller sports field.
Note that the science block appears by 1980, while the main school building stays in the northeastern area.
Identify features that remain broadly stable across the maps, including the main road along the northern boundary and the playground in the southeast.

Suggested structure

Introduce the dates and identify the maps as changes to the school site.
Give an overview of the main redevelopment and the features that remain.
Describe the 1950 layout using clear directional references.
Compare the main additions and replacements in 1980 and 2010.
End with the most notable change, such as the car park’s expansion and the sports field’s reduction.

Useful vocabulary & examples

occupy the western side: be located across the western part of a site
By 2010, the car park occupied most of the western side.
be replaced by: be removed and have something else put in its place
The houses and farmland were replaced by facilities for parking and sport.
expand southwards: increase in size toward the south
The car park expanded southwards between 1980 and 2010.
remain in the northeastern area: stay broadly in the northeast part of a location
The main school building remained in the northeastern area of the site.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West park secondary school since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons while relevant.

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Band 5.0

The photos illustrate a reconstruction of the West park Secondary School from 1950 to 2010. Overall, location and the size of the main road remained the same and the placement of a playground was similar. However, almost all other park facilities experienced changes, while some were replaced by others. In 1950, vast majority of the school grounds were divided into four main areas. Houses occupied the north-western part, with farmland directly below them. The school building was on the eastern side near the main road, while the playground was in the south-east.

By 1980, houses and farmland had disappeared. A car park took up the western side of the site, and a science block was added between it and the main school building. A sports field replaced the former farmland in the south-west, while playground remained in the south-east.

In 2010, the main school building and playground were still on the eastern side. The science block was positioned just left of the main building. The car park covered most of the western area, and the sports field had become a small area between the car park and playground. Thus, school facilities were reorganized substantially, although the road and the playground's general position remained unchanged.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write an overview that names the main transformations: houses and farmland were removed, a science block and car park appeared, and the sports field changed in size.

Use precise site vocabulary throughout; refer to the “school grounds” or “school facilities,” not “park facilities.”

Proofread noun phrases in the completed answer, especially articles before singular nouns and expressions such as “the vast majority.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

204

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.5 Band

The response covers all three dates and identifies major changes, including that “A sports field replaced the former farmland” and that the car park occupied the western area. The overview notes the road and playground’s continuity, but it understates the scale of change and calls the school site’s features “park facilities.” For a stronger summary, make the overview name the main replacements and the addition of the science block.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The answer follows a clear chronological sequence, moving from “In 1950” to “By 1980” and then “In 2010.” This makes the development easy to follow, and contrasts such as the farmland being replaced help connect the maps. The 2010 details repeat some earlier location information, however. Group the changes by area or highlight the key 1980-to-2010 development to make comparisons more efficient.

Lexical Resource

5.5 Band

There is useful map vocabulary in phrases such as “occupied the north-western part,” “replaced the former farmland,” and “positioned just left.” However, “park facilities” is imprecise for a school site, while “the placement of a playground was similar” sounds less natural than a direct statement that it remained in a similar position. Use accurate terms such as “school grounds” and vary verbs for additions, removals, and relocation.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.0 Band

The answer uses both simple descriptions and longer clauses, for example “A sports field replaced the former farmland … while playground remained in the south-east.” There is a clear article error in “vast majority of the,” and “while playground remained” also needs an article. The opening coordination, “location and the size … remained,” is awkward. Check articles before singular and countable nouns, then read each sentence aloud for natural phrasing.

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