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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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210 words AcademicTask 1Map

Task 1

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Trace how the western side changed from houses and farmland to a car park and sports field, then to an expanded car park and smaller sports field.
Note that the science block appears by 1980, while the main school building stays in the northeastern area.
Identify features that remain broadly stable across the maps, including the main road along the northern boundary and the playground in the southeast.

Suggested structure

Introduce the dates and identify the maps as changes to the school site.
Give an overview of the main redevelopment and the features that remain.
Describe the 1950 layout using clear directional references.
Compare the main additions and replacements in 1980 and 2010.
End with the most notable change, such as the car park’s expansion and the sports field’s reduction.

Useful vocabulary & examples

occupy the western side: be located across the western part of a site
By 2010, the car park occupied most of the western side.
be replaced by: be removed and have something else put in its place
The houses and farmland were replaced by facilities for parking and sport.
expand southwards: increase in size toward the south
The car park expanded southwards between 1980 and 2010.
remain in the northeastern area: stay broadly in the northeast part of a location
The main school building remained in the northeastern area of the site.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West park secondary school since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons while relevant.

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Band 7.0

The drawings below illustrate West Park Secondary School’s development since it was built in 1950. Overall, the school’s main building remained the same. There were various changes made to other parts of the school, especially the eastern side. At first, in 1950, the school consisted of only two areas, the main building and a playground. However, the plan also shows houses and farmland on the western side, so the site actually contained four main areas. By 1980, the houses and farmland had been replaced. A car park occupied the north-western section, while a sports field covered the south-western area. A science block had also been added between the car park and the main school building. The playground remained in the south-east, and the school building continued to stand beside the main road. By 2010, the car park occupied much of the western side, with the sports field repositioned in a narrower area immediately to its east. The science block lay between the car park and the school building, with the sports field directly below it. The playground remained in the south-east, and the main road was unchanged. Overall, the key developments were the replacement of housing and farmland with school facilities, while the main building and playground stayed in place.

Targeted Improvement Tips

List all four areas visible in 1950—main building, playground, houses and farmland—rather than saying there were only two.

Make the overview reflect the whole site: note that the main road, school building and playground remained, while the western areas were redeveloped.

Compare locations precisely by tracking the car park on the west, the science block beside the school, and the sports field’s position between 1980 and 2010.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

210

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The response identifies the main building and playground as lasting features and describes the additions and replacements across the maps. However, the opening claim that the site had “only two areas” overlooks the houses and farmland shown in 1950; the continuation later corrects this, but the contradiction remains. For stronger coverage, identify all four site areas at the outset, then compare what was replaced or added by 1980 and 2010.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.0 Band

The answer follows a clear chronological route, signalled by “in 1950,” “By 1980,” and “By 2010,” and finishes with an overview of the development. This makes the timeline easy to follow. The correction beginning “However” usefully addresses the initial omission, though it interrupts the progression slightly. State the full 1950 layout in the opening description so the later years can be compared without backtracking.

Lexical Resource

7.0 Band

Map vocabulary is varied and generally precise, including “replaced,” “occupied,” “south-eastern,” and “positioned.” The phrases “various changes” and “other parts” are less informative than the specific changes described later, and “especially the eastern side” underplays the major western and central developments. Replace broad wording in the overview with a concise summary such as the conversion of housing and farmland into parking and sports facilities.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.5 Band

The response uses a good range of accurate structures, including the relative clause in “the main building, while the sports field…” and clear past-perfect forms such as “had been replaced.” The sentence boundaries and tense choices are controlled. The main weakness is not grammatical but the awkward phrasing “At first, in 1950,” which repeats the time reference. Streamline it to “In 1950” and keep the otherwise effective sentence patterns.

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