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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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213 words AcademicTask 1Map

Task 1

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Trace how the western side changed from houses and farmland to a car park and sports field, then to an expanded car park and smaller sports field.
Note that the science block appears by 1980, while the main school building stays in the northeastern area.
Identify features that remain broadly stable across the maps, including the main road along the northern boundary and the playground in the southeast.

Suggested structure

Introduce the dates and identify the maps as changes to the school site.
Give an overview of the main redevelopment and the features that remain.
Describe the 1950 layout using clear directional references.
Compare the main additions and replacements in 1980 and 2010.
End with the most notable change, such as the car park’s expansion and the sports field’s reduction.

Useful vocabulary & examples

occupy the western side: be located across the western part of a site
By 2010, the car park occupied most of the western side.
be replaced by: be removed and have something else put in its place
The houses and farmland were replaced by facilities for parking and sport.
expand southwards: increase in size toward the south
The car park expanded southwards between 1980 and 2010.
remain in the northeastern area: stay broadly in the northeast part of a location
The main school building remained in the northeastern area of the site.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West park secondary school since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons while relevant.

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Band 4.0

The pictures show three maps, which are illustrated the development of Westpark Secondary School in different period of time. (time periods) Overall, main road was in that place in each of the year which is illustrated, more over main building of the school is stated on the map (idicated). Despite this, there are some parts, that changed over the period. In 1950, there were three houses on the west side, while the school was in the north-east. Farmland occupied the south-west area and a playground was in the south-east. In 1980, the houses and farmland had disappeared. A car park was built on the west, and a science block was added between it and the main school building. The sports field was placed in the south-west, while the playground stayed in the south-east. In 2010, the main road and school building remained in the same general place. The car park took up more of the western side and the science block was in the upper middle part. The sports field was now located below the science block, and the playground stayed in the lower right. Overall, the school changed from a site with houses and farmland to one with more facilities. The road was the only feature that stayed unchanged in all maps.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write a two-part overview that states both the unchanged road and the main transition from houses and farmland to school facilities; avoid calling the road the only unchanged feature because the playground also stays in the same general area.

Make a small feature-by-date table before drafting, recording the position of the houses, farmland, car park, science block, sports field and playground in each map.

After drafting, check articles and plurals in the opening, then replace vague location wording such as “stayed” with specific expressions such as “remained in the south-east.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

213

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

4.5 Band

The completed answer covers all three dates and identifies important changes, including that the houses and farmland disappeared and that a car park and science block were added. It also notes the road’s continuity. However, the overview claim that the road was the “only feature” unchanged is too broad: the playground remains in the south-east/lower-right area across the maps. Next, check each feature across all dates before making a summary comparison.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The answer follows a mostly clear chronological order, moving from “In 1950” to “In 1980” and then “In 2010,” which helps readers track the development. The final overview also attempts to draw the changes together. However, the opening overview is difficult to follow, and the comma in “there are some parts, that changed” interrupts the sentence. Use a concise overview first, then group the details by date or by features that stayed and changed.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

The response uses relevant map vocabulary such as “farmland,” “car park,” “science block” and “sports field,” and phrases like “disappeared” and “remained” help describe change. Some wording is inaccurate or repetitive, including “is stated on the map” and “stayed” for describing locations. Replace these with precise map-reporting expressions such as “was located,” “was replaced by” and “remained in the same position,” choosing them according to the visual evidence.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.0 Band

The later sentences include some clear simple past forms, for example “A car park was built” and “The sports field was placed.” However, the opening contains errors in “which are illustrated the development” and “different period of time”; “main road” also lacks an article, and “more over” is incorrectly separated. Proofread subject–verb patterns, plurals, articles and spelling, then combine simple sentences only when the relationships remain clear.

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