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Task 1

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Trace how the western side changed from houses and farmland to a car park and sports field, then to an expanded car park and smaller sports field.
Note that the science block appears by 1980, while the main school building stays in the northeastern area.
Identify features that remain broadly stable across the maps, including the main road along the northern boundary and the playground in the southeast.

Suggested structure

Introduce the dates and identify the maps as changes to the school site.
Give an overview of the main redevelopment and the features that remain.
Describe the 1950 layout using clear directional references.
Compare the main additions and replacements in 1980 and 2010.
End with the most notable change, such as the car park’s expansion and the sports field’s reduction.

Useful vocabulary & examples

occupy the western side: be located across the western part of a site
By 2010, the car park occupied most of the western side.
be replaced by: be removed and have something else put in its place
The houses and farmland were replaced by facilities for parking and sport.
expand southwards: increase in size toward the south
The car park expanded southwards between 1980 and 2010.
remain in the northeastern area: stay broadly in the northeast part of a location
The main school building remained in the northeastern area of the site.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West park secondary school since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons while relevant.

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Band 4.0

The figure illustrate the west park secondary school’s replacement that has been taken by its construction from 1950 to 2010. Overall it readily apparent that the houses and farmland, which were situated in 1950, has been taken down in 1980 and replaced by car park, sport field and science block, moreover, carpark have expended the area around the school. In 1950, the school was on the north side of the site, with houses to its left and farmland below them. The playground was in the south-east corner. By 1980, the houses and farmland had disappeared. The school building was shown as the main building in the north-east, and a science block was added beside it. A car park took the place of the houses, while a sports field was built in the south-west. The playground stayed in the same south-east position. In 2010, further changes can be seen. The car park became much larger and occupied most of the western part of the site. The science block was between the car park and the main building, above the sports field. The sports field became smaller, while the main building and playground remained in the eastern part. Overall, the site changed from a school with houses and farmland nearby into one with larger parking and sports facilities.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write an overview that contrasts the site’s main transformation with the features that remain, especially the main school building and playground.

Before describing each date, note each feature’s position and what changed; distinguish the expanded car park from the newly added sports and science facilities.

Proofread each sentence for subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation, then replace imprecise verbs such as “expended” with “expanded.”

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Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

216

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

4.0 Band

You identify the three time points and several important changes, including that “The car park became much larger” and that the playground stayed in the same position. However, the opening claim that farmland and houses were “replaced by car park, sport field and science block” blurs which features replaced which areas, and the map’s unchanged main building is not clearly highlighted in the overview. Next, group the key changes accurately by location and state the main overall pattern.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The answer follows a mostly helpful chronology, moving from “In 1950” to “By 1980” and then “In 2010,” so readers can track the development. The final overview also attempts to summarise the transformation. However, the long opening sentence joins several claims with a comma and “moreover,” making the relationships difficult to follow. Use a short overview followed by one paragraph for 1950–1980 and one for 1980–2010, with clear location-based comparisons.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

There is some relevant map vocabulary, such as “north-east,” “south-west,” and “occupied most of the western part,” which helps describe location and scale. However, repeated or inaccurate choices weaken precision: “replacement” does not describe the map changes naturally, and “expended” is not the intended verb for an area becoming larger. Next, practise accurate map verbs such as “was replaced by,” “was added,” and “expanded,” and use consistent forms such as “car park” and “sports field.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

3.5 Band

The answer includes some clear simple sentences, for example, “The playground was in the south-east corner.” However, frequent agreement and sentence-boundary problems make the opening hard to understand: “The figure illustrate” and “Overall it readily apparent” both need a finite verb, while the first overview sentence is a comma splice. Next, check subject–verb agreement, articles, and full stops sentence by sentence; practise revising one long sentence into two short ones.

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