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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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Task 1

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Trace how the western side changed from houses and farmland to a car park and sports field, then to an expanded car park and smaller sports field.
Note that the science block appears by 1980, while the main school building stays in the northeastern area.
Identify features that remain broadly stable across the maps, including the main road along the northern boundary and the playground in the southeast.

Suggested structure

Introduce the dates and identify the maps as changes to the school site.
Give an overview of the main redevelopment and the features that remain.
Describe the 1950 layout using clear directional references.
Compare the main additions and replacements in 1980 and 2010.
End with the most notable change, such as the car park’s expansion and the sports field’s reduction.

Useful vocabulary & examples

occupy the western side: be located across the western part of a site
By 2010, the car park occupied most of the western side.
be replaced by: be removed and have something else put in its place
The houses and farmland were replaced by facilities for parking and sport.
expand southwards: increase in size toward the south
The car park expanded southwards between 1980 and 2010.
remain in the northeastern area: stay broadly in the northeast part of a location
The main school building remained in the northeastern area of the site.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West park secondary school since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons while relevant.

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Band 6.0

The diagram illustrates the differences in West Park Secondary School’s constructions in 1950, 1980 and 2010. Overall, through a 60 year period, the West Park Secondary School had changed in buildings and expansion. However, the location of the main building of the school was constant. From 1950 to 1980, there were changes in buildings as the houses and farmland were removed and replaced by new facilities. By 1980, the houses had given way to a car park and a science block, while the farmland had become a sports field. The school building remained in the upper-right part of the site, and the playground continued to occupy the lower-right area. In 2010, the car park had expanded southwards and occupied most of the western side. The sports field was reduced and moved towards the centre of the site, below the science block. The science block remained beside the main school building, which stayed in the north-east. The playground also remained in the south-east. In summary, the site became more developed, with new parking and sports facilities, while the main school and playground retained their general positions.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write a one-sentence overview that names the major change (the site became more developed) and the main features that stayed in place (the main school and playground).

For each period, compare locations directly: state what replaced the houses and farmland, then describe how the car park and sports field changed by 2010.

After drafting, check every phrase describing time or change, including “over a 60-year period,” “was replaced by,” and “expanded,” for natural grammar and accurate map meaning.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

185

Type

Map

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The response identifies the key overall pattern: “the location of the main building of the school was constant,” and covers the main changes from 1950 to 2010, including the replacement of houses and farmland and the later expansion of the car park. It also compares features across periods. The overview wording about “buildings and expansion” is vague, however. Make the overall transformation more precise by naming the main additions and the areas that stayed in place.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The answer follows a clear chronological sequence, moving from 1950–1980 to 2010, and phrases such as “By 1980” and “In 2010” help readers track the changes. The final summary reinforces the main pattern. However, the opening overview repeats the school’s name and the transition into details is slightly awkward after “there were changes in buildings as.” Use a concise overview followed by clearly separated period-by-period comparisons.

Lexical Resource

5.5 Band

Useful map vocabulary includes “car park,” “sports field,” “occupied,” and “remained,” which helps specify both land use and location. Some choices are imprecise or unnatural, especially “School’s constructions” and “had changed in buildings and expansion.” The response also relies repeatedly on “remained.” Use accurate collocations such as “school facilities,” “was converted into,” and “was situated,” while varying location and change verbs where appropriate.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.0 Band

The response uses past-tense forms to describe the historical maps, and the clause “while the farmland had become a sports field” shows an attempt at complex sentence structure. However, “through a 60 year period” and “had changed in buildings and expansion” are not well-formed expressions, and “60 year” needs a hyphen when used before a noun. Check prepositions and verb patterns, and prefer direct constructions such as “Over 60 years, the site changed considerably.”

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