Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

The illustration highlights the various stages involved in the production of cow milk from original ingredients. A closer look at the diagram highlights the fact that there are six stages to the milk making process and each will be explained in the writing section below. The process begins when Cows on some farms are frozen according to the source wording, but the diagram actually shows cows grazing, not being frozen.

Overall, milk is collected from cows, stored under refrigeration and delivered to a dairy. It then follows two processing routes: packaged drinking milk or other products such as cheese, cream and butter, which are transported to shops.

The process begins with cows grazing in a field. They are milked by machine twice a day, and the collected milk is transferred to refrigerated storage. A milk tanker then transports it from the farm to the dairy, with delivery shown as a daily stage. The refrigeration concerns the milk; the cows are not shown being frozen.

At the dairy, one branch of production leads to milk being pasteurised and packaged. The other produces cheese, cream and butter. These outputs are shown separately, although the diagram does not specify the individual manufacturing steps for each of the latter products.

The finished goods are subsequently sent to supermarkets and shops. The overall sequence therefore moves from collection and cooling to transport, processing and retail distribution, rather than showing unrelated products made independently at the farm.