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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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187 words AcademicTask 1Process Diagram
Task 1

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Ideas to explore

  • Describe the process as a sequence from the farm to retail, rather than treating the products as unrelated items.
  • Mention the cold-storage stage and daily tanker delivery as important links between milking and dairy processing.
  • Distinguish the two visible product outcomes: pasteurized, packaged milk and cheese, cream and butter.

Suggested structure

  1. Introduce what the diagram depicts.
  2. Give an overview of the start, end and main phases.
  3. Describe milking, refrigerated storage and tanker delivery in sequence.
  4. Explain the outputs at the dairy and finish with transport to shops.
Useful vocabulary & examples
refrigerated storage
a cooled place where milk is kept before further processing or transport

The milk is transferred to refrigerated storage after the cows are milked.

daily tanker delivery
milk being transported by tanker once each day

A tanker collects the stored milk for daily delivery to the dairy.

pasteurized and packaged
heat-treated to make it safer, then put into containers for sale

Some of the milk is pasteurized and packaged as drinking milk.

offered for sale
made available for customers to buy

The finished dairy products are transported to shops and offered for sale.

Task Prompt

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced.
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Band 4.0

The figures illustrate the manufacturing stages of milky-based product. In general, these involve five procedures which cover the raw materials production from cows, the ready-to-use milk and the phase of its possible dairy items subsequently distributed. First of all, the farming is measure the quality of milk by grazing sufficiently the cows in order to produce suitable milk. After that, the cows are milked by a machine twice a day. The milk is then kept in refrigerated storage, before a milk tanker carries it to the dairy every day. At the dairy, the milk goes through different processes. Some of it is pasteurized and put into packages. The diagram also shows that other dairy products made at the dairy include cheese, cream and butter. These products are then sent to supermarkets and shops, where people can buy them. At the end, the milk and other dairy products are ready for sale. This process starts with cows eating grass and ends with the products being sold. There are several stages between these two parts, and the dairy is the main place where milk is changed into different products.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
Replace the unsupported claim about measuring milk quality with the visible first step: cows graze in a field.
2
Write a one-sentence overview identifying the process’s start and end, without giving an uncertain stage count.
3
Use precise process verbs and check each sentence for a clear subject, verb and article—for example, “A tanker delivers the milk to the dairy every day.”

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