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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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183 words AcademicTask 1Process Diagram
Task 1

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Ideas to explore

  • Describe the process as a sequence from the farm to retail, rather than treating the products as unrelated items.
  • Mention the cold-storage stage and daily tanker delivery as important links between milking and dairy processing.
  • Distinguish the two visible product outcomes: pasteurized, packaged milk and cheese, cream and butter.

Suggested structure

  1. Introduce what the diagram depicts.
  2. Give an overview of the start, end and main phases.
  3. Describe milking, refrigerated storage and tanker delivery in sequence.
  4. Explain the outputs at the dairy and finish with transport to shops.
Useful vocabulary & examples
refrigerated storage
a cooled place where milk is kept before further processing or transport

The milk is transferred to refrigerated storage after the cows are milked.

daily tanker delivery
milk being transported by tanker once each day

A tanker collects the stored milk for daily delivery to the dairy.

pasteurized and packaged
heat-treated to make it safer, then put into containers for sale

Some of the milk is pasteurized and packaged as drinking milk.

offered for sale
made available for customers to buy

The finished dairy products are transported to shops and offered for sale.

Task Prompt

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced.
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Band 6.0

The provided diagram illustrates how milk and dairy products are manufactured. Overall, there are 8 stages in the process, which begins with cows grazing and ends with packaged milk at the grocery stores. The first stage commences when the cows are pastured and then they pass through the milking machine regularly two times per day. After milking, the milk is transferred to refrigerated storage tanks, where it is kept cool before collection. A milk tanker visits each day and carries it to a dairy for further processing. At the dairy, the milk is pasteurised and then packaged, while some is made into cheese, cream and butter. These products are then transported to supermarkets and shops, where they are put on sale. In sequence, the process moves from keeping and milking the cows, through cooling and delivery, to processing and distribution. Although the diagram identifies eight stages overall, the later stages branch into separate outcomes: packaged milk and other dairy goods. This means that not all the milk follows exactly the same final route, even though all products are ultimately sent to retail outlets.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
Revise the overview so it names both outcomes: packaged milk and other dairy products sent to shops.
2
Describe the middle stages in a clean sequence: refrigerated storage, daily tanker delivery, then processing at the dairy.
3
Replace awkward wording in the opening with “the cows graze” and “they are milked twice a day”; check that each sentence has a clear subject and action.

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