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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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170 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Identify the overall direction of each line separately: margarine and butter fall over the full period, while the low-fat variety rises after it appears and then declines.
Highlight key turning points: butter peaks in 1986, margarine reaches a plateau around 100 grams in 1991–1996, and the low-fat line surges by 2001.
Mention crossovers where they change the ranking: Low Fat & Reduced Spreads is highest in 2001, while butter and margarine are no longer the leading series.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, naming all three spreads, the years and the unit.
Give an overview that accurately summarises the different overall patterns and the late-period ranking.
Describe butter and margarine together, using their start values, peaks or plateaus and final values.
Describe the later-starting low-fat series and compare its 2001 peak with the other spreads.

Useful vocabulary & examples

reached a peak of: rose to its highest recorded value
Butter reached a peak of approximately 160 grams in 1986.
remained stable at: stayed at approximately the same level
Margarine consumption remained stable at around 100 grams from 1991 to 1996.
overtook both alternatives: became higher than the other two series
Low Fat & Reduced Spreads overtook both alternatives in 2001.
eased to: fell slightly or gradually to a lower value
The low-fat spread eased to about 70 grams by 2007.

Task Prompt

The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The line graph illustrations depict three types of spreads (margarine, low-fat & reduced spreads, and butter) over a period of 26 years from 1981 to 2007. The units are measured in grams. Overall, at the start of the period, butter was the most popular spread, but its consumption has sharply decreased over the years. However, low-fat and reduced spreads showed a contrasting trend, becoming the most consumed option by the end of the period. Butter consumption began at about 140 grams, rose to a peak of around 160 in 1986, and then declined steadily to approximately 50 grams in 2007. Margarine started at roughly 90 grams, dipped to 80 in 1986, and recovered to 100 in 1991. It remained at this level in 1996, before falling to about 80 in 2001 and 40 by 2007. Low-fat spreads were first recorded at about 10 grams in 1996, then climbed sharply to approximately 85 in 2001. Although their figure subsequently fell to around 70 grams in 2007, this category finished above both alternatives.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write an overview that explicitly compares the end-point leaders and the broad direction of all three series.

Check each number against the graph, then use “about” or “approximately” for values that are read visually rather than presented as exact data.

After drafting, check that past-tense verbs are used consistently for this completed 1981–2007 period and replace unclear references such as “their figure.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

170

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The answer identifies the three categories and gives the main contrast: butter declines while low-fat spreads rise later in the period. The added figures also cover key turning points, including butter’s peak of around 160 grams and the low-fat series’ high point near 85. However, the overview could state more directly that margarine fluctuates before declining. Next, make the overview a concise summary of all three trends before presenting the details.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.0 Band

The response moves from an introduction and overview into a readable account of each series. Phrases such as “then declined steadily” and “Although their figure subsequently fell” help show sequence and contrast. The butter and margarine details are grouped separately, while the final sentence explains the low-fat trend. To make the comparison even clearer, organise the details into two linked groups—for example, declining butter and margarine, followed by the later rise in low-fat spreads.

Lexical Resource

6.5 Band

There is useful task vocabulary in “peak,” “declined steadily,” “dipped,” and “climbed sharply,” and the wording distinguishes the trends rather than repeating one verb. A few expressions are less natural, notably “The line graph illustrations depict” and “their figure,” which reduce precision. Prefer concise collocations such as “the graph illustrates” and “the figure for low-fat spreads”; continue using varied but accurate trend language.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.0 Band

Most trend descriptions use clear past-tense clauses, as in “Margarine started at roughly 90 grams” and “It remained at this level in 1996.” The opening shifts to “has sharply decreased” even though the chart period has ended, and “The line graph illustrations” has an awkward number and subject construction. Review tense consistency for completed time periods and check subject–verb phrasing in the introduction before writing the detail sentences.

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