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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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208 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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The coast begins as the leading destination, dips slightly in 1992, then rises to finish highest.
Mountain visitor numbers rise gradually, with little change between 1997 and 2002.
The lakes have the most pronounced movement: a steep climb to the 2002 peak followed by a substantial fall.

Suggested structure

Introduce the chart, locations, unit and period.
Summarise the overall trends and identify the standout peak or change in ranking.
Describe the coast’s figures in time order.
Compare the more gradual mountain trend with the lakes’ sharper rise and fall.

Useful vocabulary & examples

rose steadily: increased gradually over time
Coastal visitor numbers rose steadily after 1992.
remained close to this level: stayed approximately the same
The mountain figure remained close to 30,000 in 2002.
peaked at: reached its highest point at a particular value
The number of visitors to the lakes peaked at around 75,000 in 2002.
fell to: decreased until it reached a stated value
Lake visits fell to 50,000 by 2007.

Task Prompt

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The graph illustrates the number of foreign tourists who visit the coast, the mountains and the lakes in a European country over a 20-year period from 1987 to 2007. Overall, most people preferred visiting the coast whereas the mountains were visited by least number of tourists throughout this period. Through these years, both the coast and the lakes saw considerable changes, while mountain visits rose more steadily.

In 1987, around 40,000 tourists visited the coast, compared with 20,000 who went to the mountains and 10,000 who visited the lakes. The coastal figure then dipped to approximately 35,000 in 1992, before rising to 50,000 in 1997 and about 65,000 in 2002. It finished at roughly 75,000 in 2007, the highest figure shown.

The number of visitors to the lakes climbed from 10,000 to 40,000 between 1987 and 1997, then rose sharply to a peak of around 75,000 in 2002. By 2007, it had fallen to 50,000. Mountain visits increased more gradually, from 20,000 in 1987 to approximately 35,000 in 2007. The figures show that the lakes, rather than the mountains, had the fewest visitors in 1987; the mountains were the least visited area from 1997 onwards.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Rewrite the overview to state that the coast ends highest, the lakes peak in 2002 before declining, and the mountains rise more gradually; do not claim the mountains are lowest at every point.

Use approximate figures to compare the three series at key years: 1987, 1997, the 2002 peak, and 2007.

After drafting, check each trend claim against the graph and review article use, especially phrases such as “the fewest visitors.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

208

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.5 Band

The answer identifies the main upward trend for the coast and the dramatic rise and fall for the lakes, with useful comparisons such as “75,000 in 2002” and “fallen to 50,000.” However, the overview says the mountains were least popular “throughout this period,” which conflicts with the lakes’ lower starting figure. Next, make the overview match the full period and select the peak, ending values, and overall trend for each area.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The response has a clear overview followed by chronological detail, and the shift from coastal figures to the lakes and mountains makes the comparisons easy to follow. The phrase “Through these years” signals a transition, though it is less precise than a direct trend statement. The closing clarification about the lakes corrects the earlier overview but would be better integrated into it. Group the data by main pattern and avoid repeating information.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

Vocabulary such as “dipped,” “rising,” “climbed,” and “peak” describes the line movements clearly, while “approximately” and “roughly” appropriately signal estimates. Some wording is repetitive, including repeated uses of “visited” and “figure,” and “preferred visiting” suggests a preference rather than simply reporting visitor totals. Use varied, accurate terms such as “visitor numbers,” “reached a high,” and “declined” where they fit the data.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.0 Band

Most sentences are complete and the time relationships are understandable, as in “before rising to 50,000 in 1997.” There is a noticeable missing article in “visited by least number,” and the opening uses present tense (“who visit”) for a graph covering a past period. Review articles and maintain past tense for the reported years; then check longer sentences for precise links between dates and changes.

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