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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 9.0 Example

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201 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Compare which series begins higher and which one ends higher; here, production starts slightly above consumption, but consumption finishes much higher.
Identify the different rates of change: production rises gradually, while consumption accelerates after the early plotted years.
Mention the axis-label problem: the task’s stated dates do not match the displayed years, and the last year is printed twice.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, measures, and units.
Give an overview of the overall direction and the main contrast between the two lines.
Describe production’s starting level, plateau, and gradual later rise.
Describe consumption’s early stability and sharper increase, then compare the final plotted values.
Briefly note that the displayed dates are inconsistent or duplicated where this affects interpretation.

Useful vocabulary & examples

rose gradually: increased slowly over time
Oil production rose gradually after remaining near 3 million barrels per day.
remained stable: stayed at approximately the same level
Production remained stable at around 3 million barrels per day for a period.
increased substantially: went up by a large amount
Consumption increased substantially and reached about 6.3 million barrels per day at the final plotted point.
the gap widened: the difference between two values became greater
The gap between oil consumption and production widened as consumption climbed.

Task Prompt

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 9.0

The line graph illustrates the amount of oil producted and consumed daily in China from 1982 to 2006, measured in millions of barrels day. Overall, it can be seen that both oil production and consumption increased during the period. However, oil consumption rose more sharply and eventually exceeded oil production after the early 1990. China's production was about 2 million barrels per day at the first plotted point, slightly higher than consumption, which was just under this figure. Production then rose to approximately 3 million barrels per day and stayed close to that level for much of the period, before finishing at around 3.5 million. Consumption, by contrast, changed little at first, remaining near 2 million barrels per day. It then increased substantially, reaching about 3.3 million at the point where it overtook production. The figure continued to climb afterwards, to approximately 4 million, 5 million and finally just over 6 million barrels per day. As a result, the difference between consumption and production widened considerably towards the end, and consumption finished at nearly twice the production level. The task gives the period as 1982–2006, although the year labels visible on the graph do not match those dates.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Check the graph’s horizontal-axis years against the task statement; where they conflict, avoid assigning individual values to specific years and describe the sequence instead.

Use the full unit consistently: write “millions of barrels per day” in the introduction and when giving measurements.

Make the overview concise, then compare the stable production trend with consumption’s later rise and the resulting end-of-period gap.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

9.0

Excellent

Words

201

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The overview identifies the main pattern: “oil consumption rose more sharply” and finished above production. The completed detail also compares the series and uses approximate values visible on the graph. However, the preserved phrase “from 1982 to 2006” conflicts with the year labels shown in the visual, and “after the early 1990” is imprecise. Next, check the axis against the task statement and describe the crossover by its plotted position if the years cannot be reconciled.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The answer moves from an overview to production, then consumption, and ends with the widening gap, so the comparison is easy to follow. “By contrast” clearly signals the change in focus. The opening’s “Overall” and “However” could be more efficiently combined, and the final sentence about mismatched dates interrupts the chart summary. Keep that issue separate from the report, and group the early and late trends into clear comparison paragraphs.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is useful graph vocabulary in “rose more sharply,” “remained near,” “overtook,” and “widened considerably,” alongside suitable approximate quantities. However, the preserved “oil producted” is a word-form error, and “millions of barrels day” omits the needed unit phrase. “Increased” is also repeated. Check collocations for units and vary trend verbs selectively, for example using “levelled off” for the stable production segment.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The continuation includes controlled comparisons, such as “slightly higher than consumption,” and a complex result clause beginning “As a result.” The preserved opening contains clear form and article errors in “producted” and “barrels day”; “after the early 1990” also has an incomplete decade expression. These issues reduce accuracy despite otherwise readable sentences. Proofread verb forms, decade endings, and measurement phrases before submitting.

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