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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 9.0 Example

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204 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Compare which series begins higher and which one ends higher; here, production starts slightly above consumption, but consumption finishes much higher.
Identify the different rates of change: production rises gradually, while consumption accelerates after the early plotted years.
Mention the axis-label problem: the task’s stated dates do not match the displayed years, and the last year is printed twice.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, measures, and units.
Give an overview of the overall direction and the main contrast between the two lines.
Describe production’s starting level, plateau, and gradual later rise.
Describe consumption’s early stability and sharper increase, then compare the final plotted values.
Briefly note that the displayed dates are inconsistent or duplicated where this affects interpretation.

Useful vocabulary & examples

rose gradually: increased slowly over time
Oil production rose gradually after remaining near 3 million barrels per day.
remained stable: stayed at approximately the same level
Production remained stable at around 3 million barrels per day for a period.
increased substantially: went up by a large amount
Consumption increased substantially and reached about 6.3 million barrels per day at the final plotted point.
the gap widened: the difference between two values became greater
The gap between oil consumption and production widened as consumption climbed.

Task Prompt

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 9.0

The line graph illustrates the oil production and consumption in China from 1982 to 2006. Over this time period, both oil production and consumption in China experienced a steady increase. In 1982, oil production and consumption were around 2 million barrels per day, and by 2006, they had risen to approximately 3.5 million barrels per day. However, this statement needs qualification: at the plotted endpoint, production is about 3.5, whereas consumption is approximately 6.3 million barrels per day. Thus, consumption ends at nearly twice the level of production, despite their similar starting points. Production rises from about 2 to 3 million barrels per day in the early part of the graph, then changes little before edging up to about 3.5. Consumption, by contrast, stays close to 2 initially, then climbs markedly, passing production around the middle of the plotted sequence and continuing upward thereafter. The two trends therefore diverge substantially in the latter part of the chart. One caveat is that the horizontal-axis labels visible in the supplied graphic (1965 through 2010, with 2010 repeated) do not match the task's stated period, 1982–2006. The overall comparison is clear, but exact year-by-year claims cannot safely be assigned from this image.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Check each endpoint against its own coloured line: the graph ends at roughly 3.5 million barrels per day for production and 6.3 for consumption.

Replace “steady increase” with language that allows for plateaus, such as “rose overall, with little change during part of the period.”

Before assigning dates to individual points, resolve or acknowledge the mismatch between the task period (1982–2006) and the visible axis labels (1965–2010, including a repeated 2010).

AI Feedback

Overall Band

9.0

Excellent

Words

204

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.5 Band

The answer identifies the main contrast, especially that consumption finishes well above production. However, the opening claim that both series “had risen to approximately 3.5” conflicts with the plotted endpoint, where consumption is about 6.3. You later qualify this, but the contradiction weakens accuracy. The graphic’s visible year labels also do not match the task period. Make the endpoint comparison correct from the outset and flag the axis discrepancy briefly.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The sequence moves from an overview to production, consumption, and a concluding caveat. “However, this statement needs qualification” usefully signals the correction, though it has to repair a conflicting claim in the opening. The comparison “Production, by contrast” also makes the two patterns easy to follow. In a revision, build the overview around the clear divergence first, then describe each line and place the chart-label caveat at the end.

Lexical Resource

7.0 Band

The response uses precise trend language such as “edging up,” “climbs markedly,” and “diverge substantially,” which suits a line graph. “At the plotted endpoint” is also a careful way to avoid assigning a year where the labels are inconsistent. Some repetition of “production” and “consumption” is understandable for clarity, but you could vary a few references with “the former” and “the latter,” provided the referents remain unmistakable.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.0 Band

There is a good range of controlled structures, including the contrast in “Production, by contrast, stays close to 2 initially, then climbs markedly” and the subordinate clause beginning “although” in the closing caveat. Sentence boundaries and verb forms are generally clear. No major grammatical error stands out; the main weakness is the factual contradiction in the opening, not its grammar. As a final check, compare each quantified clause with the plotted lines.

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