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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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192 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Compare which series begins higher and which one ends higher; here, production starts slightly above consumption, but consumption finishes much higher.
Identify the different rates of change: production rises gradually, while consumption accelerates after the early plotted years.
Mention the axis-label problem: the task’s stated dates do not match the displayed years, and the last year is printed twice.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, measures, and units.
Give an overview of the overall direction and the main contrast between the two lines.
Describe production’s starting level, plateau, and gradual later rise.
Describe consumption’s early stability and sharper increase, then compare the final plotted values.
Briefly note that the displayed dates are inconsistent or duplicated where this affects interpretation.

Useful vocabulary & examples

rose gradually: increased slowly over time
Oil production rose gradually after remaining near 3 million barrels per day.
remained stable: stayed at approximately the same level
Production remained stable at around 3 million barrels per day for a period.
increased substantially: went up by a large amount
Consumption increased substantially and reached about 6.3 million barrels per day at the final plotted point.
the gap widened: the difference between two values became greater
The gap between oil consumption and production widened as consumption climbed.

Task Prompt

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 6.0

Oil production and consumption The line chart gives information about the amount of oil which produced and consumed in China over the period from 1982 to 2006 Overall the manufacture and expenditure of oil experienced an upward trend over the the given period. It is obvious that oil consumption witnessed was a lot higher than oil production. At the start, the two figures were close: production stood at around 2 million barrels per day, while consumption was slightly lower. Production then rose to approximately 3 million barrels per day and remained almost unchanged for much of the period. By the end, it had edged up to about 3.5 million. Consumption followed a different pattern. It increased only slightly at first, reaching roughly 2 million barrels per day, before climbing sharply from around the midpoint. It overtook production where the lines crossed and continued rising to just over 6 million barrels per day in the final years. Thus, while both measures increased overall, the rise in consumption was much more pronounced. The gap between the two measures widened substantially towards the end, with consumption finishing at almost twice the level of production.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Separate the title, introductory sentence and overview with full stops; use a new paragraph for the detailed comparisons.

State the main contrast directly: production rises modestly and then levels off, whereas consumption accelerates and finishes much higher.

Proofread the opening for passive verb forms, repeated articles and awkward verb combinations; use “was produced,” “the period” and “was higher.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

192

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.5 Band

The overview identifies an overall rise, and the continuation adds the key contrast: production levels off while consumption climbs to just over 6 million barrels per day. However, “oil consumption witnessed was a lot higher than oil production” is malformed, and the overview initially overgeneralises because production changes only modestly. The supplied task dates also conflict with the x-axis labels, so avoid date-specific claims and make the key comparison clearer.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The response moves from an overview to production and then consumption, which gives the reader a usable sequence. “Consumption followed a different pattern” clearly signals the shift between series. However, the opening has no punctuation separating the title, description and overview, and the ideas in the overview are weakened by awkward wording. Use paragraph breaks and group the two trends around a clear comparison.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

Some useful graph language appears, including “climbing sharply,” “remained almost unchanged” and “widened substantially.” These phrases distinguish the two patterns effectively. In contrast, “manufacture and expenditure” are imprecise substitutes for oil production and consumption, while “a lot higher” is informal and “witnessed was” is not a natural collocation. Prefer standard, precise trend vocabulary and avoid repeating the chart’s subject with near-synonyms.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

The later sentences include controlled structures such as “while consumption was slightly lower” and “before climbing sharply.” However, the preserved opening contains several clear errors: “which produced and consumed” lacks a grammatical passive form, “over the the” repeats an article, and “consumption witnessed was” combines incompatible verb patterns. Add full stops between the opening units, then proofread for verb forms and duplicated words.

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