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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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193 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Compare which series begins higher and which one ends higher; here, production starts slightly above consumption, but consumption finishes much higher.
Identify the different rates of change: production rises gradually, while consumption accelerates after the early plotted years.
Mention the axis-label problem: the task’s stated dates do not match the displayed years, and the last year is printed twice.

Suggested structure

Introduce the graph, measures, and units.
Give an overview of the overall direction and the main contrast between the two lines.
Describe production’s starting level, plateau, and gradual later rise.
Describe consumption’s early stability and sharper increase, then compare the final plotted values.
Briefly note that the displayed dates are inconsistent or duplicated where this affects interpretation.

Useful vocabulary & examples

rose gradually: increased slowly over time
Oil production rose gradually after remaining near 3 million barrels per day.
remained stable: stayed at approximately the same level
Production remained stable at around 3 million barrels per day for a period.
increased substantially: went up by a large amount
Consumption increased substantially and reached about 6.3 million barrels per day at the final plotted point.
the gap widened: the difference between two values became greater
The gap between oil consumption and production widened as consumption climbed.

Task Prompt

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The line graph illustrates information about the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Overall, the amount of oil consumed in China exceed the amount of oil produced per day. The number of oil barrels produced in China increased significantly, while the number of oil barrels consumed increased dramatically. The number of oil barrels produced was about 2 million per day at the first plotted point and rose to roughly 3 million by the third point. It then remained almost unchanged through 1995 and edged up to approximately 3.5 million at the final point. Consumption, by contrast, began slightly below production and increased slowly to around 2 million by 1985. It then climbed more quickly, reaching about 3.3 million in 1995 and 4 million in 2005, before rising to just over 6 million at the last plotted point. Thus, the two series crossed between 1985 and 1995, after which consumption was substantially higher. The graph’s labels appear to run from 1965 to 2010, with 2010 printed twice, which conflicts with the task statement’s 1982–2006 period; the sequence and overall trends are therefore clearer than the exact dates.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Rewrite the overview to state that production is initially slightly higher, then consumption overtakes it and finishes well above production.

Use the plotted sequence for comparisons, but explicitly note that the visible year labels (including the repeated 2010) conflict with the task’s stated 1982–2006 period.

Vary sentence subjects by using “production” and “consumption,” and check singular subjects such as “amount” for correct verb forms.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

193

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The answer identifies both measures and gives useful approximate figures, including consumption reaching “just over 6 million” at the final point. However, the overview says consumption “exceed[s]” production throughout, whereas the plotted production line is slightly higher at first and consumption overtakes it later. You also appropriately flag the mismatch between the prompt’s dates and the graph’s labels. Next, make the overview match the crossing point and qualify dates consistently.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The response moves from an overview to production details, then consumption, and finally the chart-label caveat. Phrases such as “by contrast” and “Thus” help connect these sections. However, the initial claim that consumption exceeds production conflicts with the later statement that it “began slightly below production.” For a clearer progression, give the accurate overall comparison first, then describe both lines in chronological order and place the date-label caveat at the end.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

Vocabulary such as “remained almost unchanged,” “edged up,” and “substantially higher” describes trends and comparisons clearly. The repeated wording “The number of oil barrels” is less concise, and “increased dramatically” is broad when the response later supplies more precise movement. Use terms such as “production” and “consumption” as the grammatical subjects, and reserve stronger modifiers for changes that are clearly large.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

Most of the completed description uses understandable sentence structures, including the contrast in “Consumption, by contrast, began slightly below production.” The preserved overview has a subject–verb agreement error: “the amount of oil consumed in China exceed.” Since “amount” is singular, the verb needs an -s. Check each sentence’s subject and verb, especially in the overview, and keep the tense consistent when describing the chart.

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