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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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202 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Highlight the main crossover: Japan leads in the earlier years, while China overtakes it between 2005 and 2010.
Contrast China’s steep late increase with Japan’s gradual decline.
Note that the smaller series do not follow one pattern: the US fluctuates, whereas India rises to a peak and then falls.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase what the graph measures and give the years covered.
Summarise the overall ranking change and the main trends without listing every figure.
Compare Japan and the US, using starting points, changes and final values.
Describe China and India together, emphasising China’s sharp late rise and India’s smaller peak and decline.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: formed a particular percentage or share of the total
Japan accounted for about 26% of Australian exports in 1990.
rose sharply: increased quickly and substantially
China’s share rose sharply after 2005.
fluctuated: went up and down rather than changing steadily in one direction
The percentage for the US fluctuated over the period.
peaked at: reached its highest point at a particular value
India’s share peaked at about 7% in 2010.

Task Prompt

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The line graph illustrates the percentages of Australian exports with four different countries – Japan, the US, China and India – between 1990 and 2012. Overall, the export rate between Australia and China rose steadily, contrary to that between Australia and the other countries. Also, it is clear from the graph that India and the US experienced fluctuations, while Japan's share declined slightly.

In 1990, Japan was Australia's largest export destination, at about 26%, compared with approximately 11% for the US. China's and India's figures were much lower, at around 2% and 1%, respectively. Japan's share fell to 20% in 1995 and then to roughly 18% in 2000, remaining near this level until 2005 before edging down to about 17% in 2010 and staying unchanged in 2012.

China followed the opposite pattern. Its proportion increased gradually from about 2% in 1990 to 5% in 2000, then rose more rapidly to 11% in 2005. It surged to 25% in 2010 and reached approximately 28% by the end, becoming the leading destination. The US figure fluctuated, falling to 8% in 1995, recovering to 11% in 2000, and ending at 7%. India's share climbed from around 1% to 7% in 2010, before falling to 5% in 2012.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Make the overview match every series: state that China rose sharply, Japan declined slightly, the US fluctuated and ended lower, and India rose overall before dipping.

Use destination-based phrasing such as “the share of Australian exports to China” instead of “the export rate between Australia and China.”

Check that each number is attached to its year and country, especially where the US and India lines change direction; keep approximate values consistently qualified with “about” or “around.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

202

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The response covers the main series and gives an overview: “China followed the opposite pattern” introduces its sharp rise, while the country-by-country details include key turning points. However, the overview says China's trend was “contrary to that between Australia and the other countries,” which overgeneralises because India's figure also rises overall. Next, describe Japan and the US as declining or fluctuating, while noting India's increase separately.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.0 Band

The answer moves logically from an overview to starting values, then details for Japan, China, the US and India. The transition “China followed the opposite pattern” helps signal a comparison, and dates make the sequence easy to follow. The country-focused structure is clear, though the overview's broad contrast is less precise than the later data. For an even tighter report, group the broadly declining/fluctuating lines before discussing the two increasing series.

Lexical Resource

6.5 Band

There is useful chart vocabulary in phrases such as “rose more rapidly,” “remaining near this level,” and “edging down,” which convey different kinds of movement. Some wording is less idiomatic or precise: “percentages of Australian exports with four different countries” suggests a relationship between countries rather than exports going to them. Replace it with “percentages of Australian exports to four countries,” and use “share” consistently for the plotted measure.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.0 Band

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentences, including the time sequence “before edging down to about 17% in 2010.” Punctuation around the country list and the paired figures is controlled. In “the export rate between Australia and China,” however, the noun phrase is awkward for describing export shares, and “contrary to that between” has an unclear reference. Use a clear subject such as “China's share of Australian exports rose, while…”

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