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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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213 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Highlight the main crossover: Japan leads in the earlier years, while China overtakes it between 2005 and 2010.
Contrast China’s steep late increase with Japan’s gradual decline.
Note that the smaller series do not follow one pattern: the US fluctuates, whereas India rises to a peak and then falls.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase what the graph measures and give the years covered.
Summarise the overall ranking change and the main trends without listing every figure.
Compare Japan and the US, using starting points, changes and final values.
Describe China and India together, emphasising China’s sharp late rise and India’s smaller peak and decline.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: formed a particular percentage or share of the total
Japan accounted for about 26% of Australian exports in 1990.
rose sharply: increased quickly and substantially
China’s share rose sharply after 2005.
fluctuated: went up and down rather than changing steadily in one direction
The percentage for the US fluctuated over the period.
peaked at: reached its highest point at a particular value
India’s share peaked at about 7% in 2010.

Task Prompt

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The presented line graph demonstrates the proportions of products that are sent from Australia to 4 countries between 1990 and 2012. Overall, 4 countries are pointed out: Japan, the US, China, and India. Also, the disposition of exports to China has the most significant increase compared to other countries. Upon closer examination of the chart, Japan’s share was highest at approximately 26% in 1990, before declining to 20% in 1995 and 18% in 2000. It then remained close to 18% in 2005 and slipped slightly to about 17% by 2010, staying at that level in 2012. The proportion exported to the US fluctuated: it fell from about 11% in 1990 to 8% in 1995, rose to around 11% in 2000, and then decreased to 5% in 2010 before recovering to approximately 7% in 2012. By contrast, China’s figure climbed steadily from roughly 2% in 1990 to 5% in 2000, then rose sharply to 11% in 2005 and 25% in 2010. It finished at about 28%, the highest figure on the graph. India’s share remained near 1% until 1995, rose to 5% in 2005 and peaked at around 7% in 2010, before falling to 5% in 2012. Overall, China became Australia’s largest export destination among the four countries by the end of the period.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Make the introduction identify the data directly: Australian export percentages to Japan, the US, China and India from 1990 to 2012.

Keep the overview focused on the strongest contrasts: China’s steep rise to the highest final share and Japan’s decline from the highest starting point.

When reporting figures, use approximate language consistently and check that each comparison matches the plotted years, especially China overtaking Japan between 2005 and 2010.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

213

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.0 Band

The answer identifies the main pattern in “the most significant increase” and, in the completed account, supports it with figures for all four destinations. It also reports Japan’s decline and China’s sharp rise, which are central features of the graph. The opening’s “proportions of products” is imprecise because the graph measures export percentages. Next, state the measure clearly and ensure the overview compares the start and end positions.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The response moves from an overview to country-by-country detail, and signposts such as “By contrast” help make the changes easy to follow. The completed answer also groups each country’s figures into a clear trend. However, “Also” adds little to the overview, and the opening repeats the idea that the chart shows four countries. Replace this with a concise summary of the largest rise and the contrasting decline.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is useful task vocabulary in phrases such as “rose sharply,” “fluctuated,” and “remained near,” which describe different types of movement appropriately. Some wording in the preserved opening is less natural: “proportions of products” does not accurately name the measure, while “disposition of exports” is an awkward choice for a trend. Prefer precise terms such as “share of exports” and “percentage,” and vary trend verbs only when they fit the data.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.5 Band

The detailed account uses a good range of comparative and time clauses, including “before declining to 20%” and “before falling to 5% in 2012.” These structures are generally controlled. In the preserved introduction, “4 countries are pointed out” is grammatically possible but unnatural, and “the disposition of exports to China has” is an awkward construction. Practise concise active statements, for example, naming the four destinations and describing their export shares directly.

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