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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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184 words AcademicTask 1Line Graph

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Highlight the main crossover: Japan leads in the earlier years, while China overtakes it between 2005 and 2010.
Contrast China’s steep late increase with Japan’s gradual decline.
Note that the smaller series do not follow one pattern: the US fluctuates, whereas India rises to a peak and then falls.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase what the graph measures and give the years covered.
Summarise the overall ranking change and the main trends without listing every figure.
Compare Japan and the US, using starting points, changes and final values.
Describe China and India together, emphasising China’s sharp late rise and India’s smaller peak and decline.

Useful vocabulary & examples

accounted for: formed a particular percentage or share of the total
Japan accounted for about 26% of Australian exports in 1990.
rose sharply: increased quickly and substantially
China’s share rose sharply after 2005.
fluctuated: went up and down rather than changing steadily in one direction
The percentage for the US fluctuated over the period.
peaked at: reached its highest point at a particular value
India’s share peaked at about 7% in 2010.

Task Prompt

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

User Essay Analysis

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Band 6.0

The line graph illustrates the proportion of exports from Australia to four different nations over a period of 22 years starting from 1990. Overall, the percentage of Australian exports to China and India increased, while this rate to US and Japan decreased over the period. The figure for the proportion of Australian goods exported to China rose from about 2% in 1990 to approximately 28% in 2012, making it the largest destination at the end. Japan was the leading market initially, at roughly 26%, but its share fell to around 17% by 2010 and remained stable in 2012.

China's growth was modest until 2000, when it reached about 5%, before accelerating to 11% in 2005 and 25% in 2010. India's share was much lower: it stayed close to 1% until 1995, then climbed to 5% in 2005 and peaked at around 7% in 2010 before slipping to 5% in 2012. The US figure fluctuated, falling from about 11% in 1990 to 8% in 1995, recovering to 11% in 2000, and then declining to 5% in 2010 before a small rise to 7% in 2012.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Revise the overview so it distinguishes China and India’s growth, Japan’s steady decline, and the US’s fluctuating but lower ending figure.

Use the key crossover as a comparison: China rises above Japan between 2005 and 2010, then finishes well ahead.

Check every destination phrase for natural article use, especially “the US,” and prefer concise expressions such as “export share.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

184

Type

Line Graph

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The overview identifies the main contrast in “China and India increased,” and the completed answer supports this with key figures and the crossover in China’s export share. It also describes Japan’s decline and the US’s fluctuations rather than omitting those series. One limitation is the overview’s broad claim that the rate to “US and Japan decreased”: the US line fluctuates, so its overall decline should be distinguished from its interim rises. Summarise both trend and fluctuation explicitly.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The sequence moves from an overview to details about China and Japan, then India and the US, making comparisons easy to follow. For example, “Japan was the leading market initially” sets up a clear contrast with China’s later position. The information is grouped sensibly, though the overview’s order differs from the later series grouping and the US’s changing trend could be signposted more clearly. Keep related comparisons together and use contrast markers where trends diverge.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

Phrases such as “the leading market,” “remained stable,” and “peaked at around 7%” are appropriate for describing a line graph and avoid excessive repetition. “The proportion of Australian goods exported to” is understandable but wordy, while “this rate to US and Japan” is not idiomatic. Use concise terms such as “export share” and name the destinations consistently; reserve words like “fluctuated” for series with genuine rises and falls, as with the US.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The completed answer uses a range of sentence patterns, including the contrast in “Japan was the leading market initially … but its share fell” and the colon introducing India’s details. However, the preserved phrase “while this rate to US and Japan decreased” is grammatically awkward and lacks the article before “US.” The rest of the descriptions are generally clear. Practise checking articles and ensuring that a noun such as “share” or “percentage” is explicitly linked to each destination.

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