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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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200 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Compare the largest category in each direction: aircraft parts are $72 million from the US to Vietnam, while coffee is $23 million from Vietnam to the US.
Highlight the gap between the leading and smaller categories: US exports include other goods at $35 million and machinery at $30.5 million, while Vietnam’s garments and other exports are both $2 million.
Point out close values where they help summarise the data: Vietnam’s seafood ($4.4 million) and rice ($4.3 million) are almost equal.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase what the charts compare and state that values are in millions of dollars.
Give an overview naming the leading category in each direction and any notable tie or overall contrast.
Describe US-to-Vietnam exports from the largest value to the smallest.
Describe Vietnam-to-US exports in descending order, grouping the close seafood and rice figures and the tied lowest figures.

Useful vocabulary & examples

account for: to make up or represent a stated amount or share
Aircraft parts account for $72 million of exports to Vietnam.
be valued at: to have a stated monetary value
Machinery is valued at $30.5 million.
be tied at: to have the same value as another category
Garments and other exports are tied at $2 million.
followed by: used to introduce the next item in a ranking
Coffee leads at $23 million, followed by fruit and vegetables at $16 million.

Task Prompt

The pie charts below shows exports between the US and Vietnam

User Essay Analysis

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Band 4.0

The pie chart below illustrate exports between the US and Vietnam. The first pie chart showed one of the biggest popular production in Vietnam to US is a coffee the most popular and his level of number is 23. The second popular production is Fruit and vegetabes which number is 16. The third popular is seafood, it is 4.4 million dollars. Rice is almost same, at 4.3 million, while garments and other exports are both 2 million. In the other pie chart, exports from the US to Vietnam are shown. Aircraft parts is the largest category, with 72 million dollars. Other products is 35 million, and machinery is 30.5 million. Fertiliser reaches 16.5 million, followed by cotton at 12 million. Cars is the smallest part, with 6 million dollars. Overall, coffee was the main export from Vietnam to the US, while aircraft parts was the largest US export to Vietnam. The value of US exports shown is much higher in the main categories. Vietnam's chart has coffee and fruit and vegetables as the biggest items, but all other categories are below 5 million. The charts show different goods and a large difference in the top values.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write a one-sentence overview before the details, identifying coffee and aircraft parts as the largest exports in their respective directions.

Group the figures by chart: report coffee and fruit and vegetables first for Vietnam-to-US exports, then summarise the smaller categories; do the same for the US-to-Vietnam chart.

After drafting, check every subject and verb, then replace vague phrases such as “level of number” with “value” and add “million dollars” when first reporting the figures.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

200

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The response covers both directions of trade and gives the chart values, including “aircraft parts ... 72 million dollars” and “cars ... 6 million dollars.” Its closing overview identifies the leading export in each direction, so the main pattern is present. However, the overview comes after the details, and the opening description is unclear (“one of the biggest popular production”). Next, state the key contrasts near the start and consistently identify the figures as millions of dollars.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.0 Band

The answer moves from Vietnam’s exports to the US to US exports to Vietnam, and “In the other pie chart” helps signal that shift. The overall summary is included at the end, but the response largely lists categories one by one and repeats “popular” and “largest” without a clear comparison structure. Put a concise overview before the details, then group the most important figures for each chart in separate paragraphs.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

The response uses relevant chart vocabulary such as “exports,” “category,” and “smallest,” and it names the products shown. However, phrases such as “popular production” and “his level of number” are inaccurate or unnatural for describing export values; “vegetabes” is also misspelled. Build a small set of precise terms for this chart, such as “export,” “value,” and “accounted for,” and use “product” rather than “production” for the goods.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

3.5 Band

Some simple statements communicate the figures, for example, “Rice is almost same, at 4.3 million,” but errors are frequent across the answer. The opening uses “chart ... illustrate,” and several sentences contain faulty word order or agreement, including “Aircraft parts is” and “Cars is.” Practise forming short subject–verb–complement sentences, and check articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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