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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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185 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Compare the largest category in each direction: aircraft parts are $72 million from the US to Vietnam, while coffee is $23 million from Vietnam to the US.
Highlight the gap between the leading and smaller categories: US exports include other goods at $35 million and machinery at $30.5 million, while Vietnam’s garments and other exports are both $2 million.
Point out close values where they help summarise the data: Vietnam’s seafood ($4.4 million) and rice ($4.3 million) are almost equal.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase what the charts compare and state that values are in millions of dollars.
Give an overview naming the leading category in each direction and any notable tie or overall contrast.
Describe US-to-Vietnam exports from the largest value to the smallest.
Describe Vietnam-to-US exports in descending order, grouping the close seafood and rice figures and the tied lowest figures.

Useful vocabulary & examples

account for: to make up or represent a stated amount or share
Aircraft parts account for $72 million of exports to Vietnam.
be valued at: to have a stated monetary value
Machinery is valued at $30.5 million.
be tied at: to have the same value as another category
Garments and other exports are tied at $2 million.
followed by: used to introduce the next item in a ranking
Coffee leads at $23 million, followed by fruit and vegetables at $16 million.

Task Prompt

The pie charts below shows exports between the US and Vietnam

User Essay Analysis

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Band 5.0

The chart graphs above compare correlations between exports of the US and Vietnam. All measures are considered in million dollars. Overall, the majority of exports from Vietnam to the United States is represented by coffee, whereas in vice versa correlation, aircraft parts has the considerable shares. According to the relation of Vietnam’sexportst to the USA’s exports, the largest category was coffee, at $23 million, while fruit and vegetables accounted for $16 million. Seafood and rice were similar, at $4.4 million and $4.3 million respectively; garments and other goods each stood at $2 million. In contrast, US exports to Vietnam were led by aircraft parts, at $72 million. The next largest categories were other goods ($35 million) and machinery ($30.5 million), followed by fertiliser at $16.5 million. Cotton and cars were the smallest categories, at $12 million and $6 million respectively. Overall, the listed US-to-Vietnam exports totalled $172 million, compared with $51.7 million for Vietnam-to-US exports. This means the total shown in the US-to-Vietnam chart was over three times the reverse-direction total, and the leading products were different in each direction.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the opening with a direct description of the two directions of trade, and state that the charts give values in millions of dollars.

Write one overview comparing the leading categories and totals; say “largest category,” not “majority,” when a category is below half of the total.

Group the details by export direction, and proofread for plural forms, verb agreement, and accurate use of “million(s) of dollars.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

185

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The completed response reports the main categories and values, including “aircraft parts, at $72 million” and the $51.7 million versus $172 million totals. It also gives an overall comparison. However, “the majority ... is represented by coffee” overstates coffee’s share: it is the largest category, not more than half of Vietnam’s total. Begin with a clear paraphrase of the charts and make the overview distinguish largest category from majority.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.0 Band

The response moves from an overview to category details and then a total comparison, so the reader can follow its broad progression. However, “According to the relation ... exports” makes the transition into the details difficult to understand, and “whereas in vice versa correlation” does not clearly signal the reverse direction. Use separate, clearly signposted paragraphs for each export direction and keep the overview concise.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

Some precise chart vocabulary appears, including “accounted for,” “smallest categories,” and “totalled.” However, “correlations” is not the right term for values shown in pie charts, and “considerable shares” is unnatural here. Prefer straightforward reporting language such as “export values,” “largest category,” and “was valued at,” checking that words like “majority” match the figures.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

The completed answer uses some accurate comparative structures, such as “compared with $51.7 million,” but frequent errors affect clarity. Examples include “All measures are considered in million dollars” and “aircraft parts has the considerable shares”; the preserved phrase “Vietnam’sexportst” also contains a spelling and spacing problem. Practise subject–verb agreement, plural forms, and possessives, then proofread each sentence for a complete, natural construction.

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