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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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212 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Compare the largest category in each direction: aircraft parts are $72 million from the US to Vietnam, while coffee is $23 million from Vietnam to the US.
Highlight the gap between the leading and smaller categories: US exports include other goods at $35 million and machinery at $30.5 million, while Vietnam’s garments and other exports are both $2 million.
Point out close values where they help summarise the data: Vietnam’s seafood ($4.4 million) and rice ($4.3 million) are almost equal.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase what the charts compare and state that values are in millions of dollars.
Give an overview naming the leading category in each direction and any notable tie or overall contrast.
Describe US-to-Vietnam exports from the largest value to the smallest.
Describe Vietnam-to-US exports in descending order, grouping the close seafood and rice figures and the tied lowest figures.

Useful vocabulary & examples

account for: to make up or represent a stated amount or share
Aircraft parts account for $72 million of exports to Vietnam.
be valued at: to have a stated monetary value
Machinery is valued at $30.5 million.
be tied at: to have the same value as another category
Garments and other exports are tied at $2 million.
followed by: used to introduce the next item in a ranking
Coffee leads at $23 million, followed by fruit and vegetables at $16 million.

Task Prompt

The pie charts below shows exports between the US and Vietnam

User Essay Analysis

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Band 4.0

The given chart depicts the amount of exports over two particular countries US and Vietnam. Overall, it can be seen that Vietnam exports a large amount of food items, among them coffee, fruit and vagetables acquired the the highest portion. Whereas, US mainly exports machinery and other items, where aircraft parts holded the highest amount. Looking first at Vietnam's exports to the US, coffee is the biggest category, at $23 million, while fruit and vegetables are worth $16 million. The remaining products are much smaller: seafood accounts for $4.4 million and rice for $4.3 million. Garments and other goods are the smallest categories, with $2 million each.

For exports in the opposite direction, aircraft parts dominate at $72 million. This figure is more than twice the value of the next category, other products, which stands at $35 million. Machinery also represents a substantial amount, at $30.5 million, followed by fertiliser at $16.5 million and cotton at $12 million. Cars make up the smallest share of US exports to Vietnam, at $6 million.

Overall, the charts show different leading products: coffee for Vietnam and aircraft parts for the US. US exports are also led by one much larger category, whereas Vietnam's second-largest category is closer in value to coffee.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Make the overview match the chart: name coffee ($23 million) and aircraft parts ($72 million) as the leading categories before describing other products.

Group the details by export direction and include the smaller categories with their exact figures, such as seafood ($4.4 million) and cars ($6 million).

After drafting, check every sentence for a clear subject and verb, then proofread chart terms and spelling, especially “vegetables” and “fertiliser.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

212

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.0 Band

The completed response reports the key categories and figures, including coffee at $23 million and aircraft parts at $72 million, and it identifies the different leading exports. This gives the reader a useful overview and relevant comparisons. However, the opening's claim that fruit and vegetables acquired the highest portion is imprecise because coffee is the largest category. Next, state the main leaders accurately, then compare the remaining figures.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The response moves from an overview to Vietnam's exports and then to US exports, and phrases such as “For exports in the opposite direction” help signal the shift. The final comparison also returns to the main pattern. However, “Whereas, US mainly exports...” is not a complete sentence, and the overview repeats information from the ending. Use two clearly separated detail paragraphs and make the overview a concise, accurate summary.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

Some chart vocabulary is useful and appropriately specific, including “dominate,” “accounts for,” and “smallest share.” The response also uses relevant category names rather than relying only on general descriptions. However, phrases such as “amount of exports over two particular countries” are unnatural, and “vagetables” is misspelled. Use precise Task 1 wording such as “value of exports between” and check the spelling of chart labels.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

3.5 Band

The later details use several clear comparative structures, for example, “more than twice the value” and “followed by fertiliser.” However, the opening contains repeated errors: “the the,” “holded,” and a sentence fragment beginning “Whereas,”. These reduce clarity despite the understandable data. Edit for articles, past participles, and complete sentences; for example, connect the contrast with “while” or begin a new sentence with “The US.”

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