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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 8.0 Example

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202 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Compare the largest category in each direction: aircraft parts are $72 million from the US to Vietnam, while coffee is $23 million from Vietnam to the US.
Highlight the gap between the leading and smaller categories: US exports include other goods at $35 million and machinery at $30.5 million, while Vietnam’s garments and other exports are both $2 million.
Point out close values where they help summarise the data: Vietnam’s seafood ($4.4 million) and rice ($4.3 million) are almost equal.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase what the charts compare and state that values are in millions of dollars.
Give an overview naming the leading category in each direction and any notable tie or overall contrast.
Describe US-to-Vietnam exports from the largest value to the smallest.
Describe Vietnam-to-US exports in descending order, grouping the close seafood and rice figures and the tied lowest figures.

Useful vocabulary & examples

account for: to make up or represent a stated amount or share
Aircraft parts account for $72 million of exports to Vietnam.
be valued at: to have a stated monetary value
Machinery is valued at $30.5 million.
be tied at: to have the same value as another category
Garments and other exports are tied at $2 million.
followed by: used to introduce the next item in a ranking
Coffee leads at $23 million, followed by fruit and vegetables at $16 million.

Task Prompt

The pie charts below shows exports between the US and Vietnam

User Essay Analysis

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Band 8.0

The pie charts illustrate the monetary value of exports between Vietnam and the US in millions of dollars. Overall, coffee represents the largest export from Vietnam to the US, while aircraft parts make up the majority of US exports to Vietnam. In detail, Vietnam exported $23 million worth of coffee to the US, followed by fruit and vegetables at $16 million. Much smaller amounts were recorded for seafood ($4.4 million) and rice ($4.3 million), while garments and other goods each accounted for $2 million.

By contrast, aircraft parts were the most valuable US export to Vietnam, at $72 million. This was followed by other goods, worth $35 million, and machinery, at $30.5 million. Fertiliser exports amounted to $16.5 million, while cotton and cars were lower, at $12 million and $6 million respectively.

Overall, the two directions show different leading products: coffee was Vietnam's largest listed export, whereas aircraft parts led US exports. However, although aircraft parts were the largest single category among US exports, $72 million does not represent a majority of the total shown. Vietnam's exports were also more concentrated in coffee and fruit and vegetables, while the US chart shows several sizeable categories after aircraft parts.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Check the meaning of “majority” against the whole chart: distinguish a largest single category from more than half of all exports.

Write one overview that names the leading category in each direction, then avoid restating it with different or conflicting claims later.

After reporting each group of figures, add a brief comparison, such as noting that Vietnam's next-largest category is fruit and vegetables at $16 million, compared with coffee at $23 million.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

8.0

Excellent

Words

202

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The answer identifies the leading products and reports the chart figures, including “$23 million” for coffee and “$30.5 million” for machinery. However, the overview claim that aircraft parts “make up the majority” is inaccurate: $72 million is the largest single category, but not more than half of the total displayed. The later clarification partly addresses this, but creates a contradiction. Next, check whether each overview claim is supported by the chart.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.0 Band

The response groups Vietnam's exports before turning to US exports, using “By contrast” to signal the change in direction, and ends with a comparison of the patterns. This gives the figures a clear sequence. The repeated “Overall” and the contrast between the initial majority claim and later correction weaken the progression slightly. Keep one concise overview at the start and ensure the body and conclusion do not repeat or contradict it.

Lexical Resource

7.0 Band

Phrases such as “the most valuable US export” and “Much smaller amounts” communicate ranking and scale clearly, while “accounted for” helps vary the reporting language. Most wording fits a chart summary. “Make up the majority” is not an appropriate description of the $72 million figure, and “exports” is repeated often. Use precise ranking terms such as “largest single category” and vary references with “goods” or “categories” where clear.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.5 Band

The answer uses accurate complex structures, including “although aircraft parts were the largest single category …, $72 million does not represent a majority,” and handles figures in parentheses clearly. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are controlled throughout. There is no significant grammatical error to correct; the main improvement is to avoid the content-level contradiction in the opening. Continue using a mix of concise comparisons and longer clauses without overloading sentences.

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