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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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190 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Compare the largest category in each direction: aircraft parts are $72 million from the US to Vietnam, while coffee is $23 million from Vietnam to the US.
Highlight the gap between the leading and smaller categories: US exports include other goods at $35 million and machinery at $30.5 million, while Vietnam’s garments and other exports are both $2 million.
Point out close values where they help summarise the data: Vietnam’s seafood ($4.4 million) and rice ($4.3 million) are almost equal.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase what the charts compare and state that values are in millions of dollars.
Give an overview naming the leading category in each direction and any notable tie or overall contrast.
Describe US-to-Vietnam exports from the largest value to the smallest.
Describe Vietnam-to-US exports in descending order, grouping the close seafood and rice figures and the tied lowest figures.

Useful vocabulary & examples

account for: to make up or represent a stated amount or share
Aircraft parts account for $72 million of exports to Vietnam.
be valued at: to have a stated monetary value
Machinery is valued at $30.5 million.
be tied at: to have the same value as another category
Garments and other exports are tied at $2 million.
followed by: used to introduce the next item in a ranking
Coffee leads at $23 million, followed by fruit and vegetables at $16 million.

Task Prompt

The pie charts below shows exports between the US and Vietnam

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The given pie chart illustrates commodities exported in units of a million United States Dollars ($), between the United States and Vietnam. Overall, the exports from the United States exceed those of Vietnam by a little more than three times in terms of gross revenue. Moreover, the United States is majorly selling mechanical items or aircraft parts, with exports in this category reaching $72 million. Other goods were worth $35 million, while machinery accounted for $30.5 million. The remaining US exports were fertilizer at $16.5 million, cotton at $12 million and cars at $6 million. By comparison, Vietnam's largest export to the US was coffee, at $23 million, followed by fruit and vegetables at $16 million. The other categories were all worth less than $5 million each: seafood amounted to $4.4 million and rice to $4.3 million, while garments and other goods were valued at $2 million apiece. Overall, the charts show that US exports were worth a little more than three times as much as Vietnamese exports, and that the countries had different leading products. Aircraft parts led US sales, whereas coffee was Vietnam's main export.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the overview's ratio wording with “US exports were worth a little more than three times as much as Vietnam's” to describe the chart accurately.

Use the chart's category names—especially “machinery” and “aircraft parts”—instead of the broad phrase “mechanical items.”

Organise the details by country: give the US figures together, then Vietnam's, and avoid repeating the overall comparison in the final sentence.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

190

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.0 Band

The response covers the main contrast and reports all chart categories with their values, including the close seafood and rice figures. The statement that US exports “exceed those of Vietnam by a little more than three times” is mathematically imprecise: the US total is a little over three times as much, not more than three times greater. Next, compare the totals explicitly and describe the ratio as “a little over three times as much.”

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The answer moves from an overview to US exports and then Vietnam's figures, and “By comparison” clearly signals the shift. However, the first overview sentence about the overall difference is followed by a second overall summary at the end, creating repetition. Group the figures into two clear country-focused sections and reserve the overview for the main contrasts, so the ending does not restate it.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

There is useful chart vocabulary in “largest export,” “accounted for” and “categories,” and the answer identifies the products rather than relying only on general descriptions. However, “majorly selling mechanical items” is awkward and less precise than the chart labels. Use “mainly exported aircraft parts and machinery”; also prefer the concise unit label “millions of US dollars” to “units of a million United States Dollars.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.5 Band

The response uses a mix of simple clauses and linked comparisons, for example “while machinery accounted for $30.5 million.” Most category-and-value phrases are easy to follow. The opening has an unnecessary comma before “between,” and “exports in units of a million” is an awkward construction; “The chart shows export values in millions of US dollars” is more natural. Check punctuation and phrasing in the opening before drafting the data details.

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