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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 6.0 Example

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190 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Compare the largest category in each direction: aircraft parts are $72 million from the US to Vietnam, while coffee is $23 million from Vietnam to the US.
Highlight the gap between the leading and smaller categories: US exports include other goods at $35 million and machinery at $30.5 million, while Vietnam’s garments and other exports are both $2 million.
Point out close values where they help summarise the data: Vietnam’s seafood ($4.4 million) and rice ($4.3 million) are almost equal.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase what the charts compare and state that values are in millions of dollars.
Give an overview naming the leading category in each direction and any notable tie or overall contrast.
Describe US-to-Vietnam exports from the largest value to the smallest.
Describe Vietnam-to-US exports in descending order, grouping the close seafood and rice figures and the tied lowest figures.

Useful vocabulary & examples

account for: to make up or represent a stated amount or share
Aircraft parts account for $72 million of exports to Vietnam.
be valued at: to have a stated monetary value
Machinery is valued at $30.5 million.
be tied at: to have the same value as another category
Garments and other exports are tied at $2 million.
followed by: used to introduce the next item in a ranking
Coffee leads at $23 million, followed by fruit and vegetables at $16 million.

Task Prompt

The pie charts below shows exports between the US and Vietnam

User Essay Analysis

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Band 6.0

The pie graphs illustrate information about exports between the United States and Vietnam. Overall, total amount exports from the US to Vietnam exceeded the quantity of exports from Vietnam to the US. Vietnam’s largest export to the US was coffee, while the US’ biggest export to Vietnam were aicraft parts. The amount of money spent on exports from the US to Vietnam was more than three times the value of exports in the opposite direction, at $172 million compared with about $52 million.

In exports from Vietnam to the US, coffee accounted for $23 million, making it the largest category and almost half of the total. Fruit and vegetables ranked second at $16 million. The remaining goods were much lower: seafood and rice were valued at $4.4 million and $4.3 million respectively, while garments and other products each stood at $2 million.

The US export figures were led by aircraft parts, at $72 million, followed by other goods at $35 million and machinery at $30.5 million. Fertiliser was worth $16.5 million, while cotton and cars were the smallest categories, at $12 million and $6 million respectively.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace “total amount exports” with “the total value of exports,” then give both overall totals in the overview.

Check the overview for subject–verb agreement: “the biggest export” is singular, so use “was.”

Before submitting, compare every figure and category against the chart, especially the smaller values: $4.4 million for seafood and $4.3 million for rice.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

6.0

Competent

Words

190

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.0 Band

The completed answer covers both export directions and identifies key features, including coffee at $23 million and aircraft parts at $72 million. It also compares the totals as $172 million versus about $52 million, which accurately reflects the chart. However, the overview phrase “total amount exports” is unclear, and the summary could make the scale difference more precise. Next, state each total clearly and use “approximately 3.3 times” if comparing their ratio.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The response has a sensible progression: an overview, Vietnam’s exports, then US exports. The transition “In exports from Vietnam to the US” makes the first detail section easy to follow, and the final paragraph groups the US figures together. Some information is packed into long lists, however. Next, use a clear topic sentence for each direction and group the smaller categories compactly so the reader can compare them more easily.

Lexical Resource

5.5 Band

The answer uses relevant chart language such as “accounted for,” “ranked second,” and “were valued at,” as well as appropriate category names. Some phrasing is imprecise: “amount of money spent” is less direct than describing export values, and “total amount exports” is not a natural collocation. The spelling “aicraft” also detracts from accuracy. Next, practise precise terms such as “export value” and check category names carefully.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.0 Band

There are effective comparative structures, including “more than three times” and “while cotton and cars were the smallest categories.” However, the overview has a missing article in “total amount exports,” and “the US’ biggest export … were aicraft parts” has subject–verb agreement and spelling problems. These errors occur in a prominent sentence. Next, check each sentence’s subject and verb, and proofread the overview separately before finishing.

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