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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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204 words AcademicTask 1Pie Chart

Task 1

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Compare the largest category in each direction: aircraft parts are $72 million from the US to Vietnam, while coffee is $23 million from Vietnam to the US.
Highlight the gap between the leading and smaller categories: US exports include other goods at $35 million and machinery at $30.5 million, while Vietnam’s garments and other exports are both $2 million.
Point out close values where they help summarise the data: Vietnam’s seafood ($4.4 million) and rice ($4.3 million) are almost equal.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase what the charts compare and state that values are in millions of dollars.
Give an overview naming the leading category in each direction and any notable tie or overall contrast.
Describe US-to-Vietnam exports from the largest value to the smallest.
Describe Vietnam-to-US exports in descending order, grouping the close seafood and rice figures and the tied lowest figures.

Useful vocabulary & examples

account for: to make up or represent a stated amount or share
Aircraft parts account for $72 million of exports to Vietnam.
be valued at: to have a stated monetary value
Machinery is valued at $30.5 million.
be tied at: to have the same value as another category
Garments and other exports are tied at $2 million.
followed by: used to introduce the next item in a ranking
Coffee leads at $23 million, followed by fruit and vegetables at $16 million.

Task Prompt

The pie charts below shows exports between the US and Vietnam

User Essay Analysis

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Band 7.0

The two pie charts presents information about the different items being exported between the US and Vietnam, measured in millions of dollars. Overall, it is evident that the US exports a larger amount to Vietnam than Vietnam exports to the US, with a striking difference of $120,3 million. The biggest export from the US is aircraft parts, at $72 million, while coffee is the leading Vietnamese export to the US, at $23 million. US exports to Vietnam total $172 million, compared with $51.7 million in exports from Vietnam to the US.

Aircraft parts account for the largest share of US exports, followed by other goods at $35 million and machinery at $30.5 million. Fertiliser contributes $16.5 million, while cotton and cars are lower, at $12 million and $6 million respectively.

Vietnamese exports are more concentrated in coffee and fruit and vegetables, valued at $23 million and $16 million. The remaining categories are much smaller: seafood brings in $4.4 million and rice $4.3 million, while garments and other goods each stand at $2 million. Overall, the charts show that US exports are higher in total and led by aircraft parts, whereas Vietnam's exports rely chiefly on coffee and produce.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Proofread the opening for subject–verb agreement: underline each subject and check that its verb matches, especially when the subject is plural.

Use a consistent number format and verify the total and difference: $172 million minus $51.7 million equals $120.3 million.

Organise details by direction, as in the completed response, and finish with a concise comparison rather than repeating the overview.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

204

Type

Pie Chart

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.0 Band

The completed report covers the main pattern and gives the key figures: it identifies aircraft parts at $72 million and coffee at $23 million as the leading exports, and compares totals of $172 million and $51.7 million. It also includes all chart categories. The preserved figure “$120,3 million” uses an incorrect decimal separator; write “$120.3 million” and make the comparison consistent with the totals.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.0 Band

The response moves clearly from an overview to US exports and then Vietnamese exports. The paragraph beginning “Aircraft parts account for the largest share” groups the US figures effectively, while the final section gathers Vietnam’s smaller categories together. The repeated overall conclusion is a little redundant; use the final sentence to add a direct comparison between the two export profiles instead.

Lexical Resource

6.5 Band

The vocabulary is relevant and varied, including “leading Vietnamese export,” “account for the largest share,” and “more concentrated in.” These phrases help describe ranking and distribution accurately. However, “different items being exported between” is wordy and imprecise for the two directions shown. Prefer “goods exported from each country to the other,” and keep category labels close to the chart wording.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.0 Band

Most of the completed response uses clear comparative and reporting structures, such as “while cotton and cars are lower” and “compared with $51.7 million.” However, the preserved opening, “The two pie charts presents,” has subject–verb disagreement: the plural subject requires “present.” The preserved number “$120,3” also needs a full stop as the decimal marker. Check plural subjects and number formatting during proofreading.

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