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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 9.0 Example

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Task 1

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Ideas to explore

The clearest overall change is the rise in gate capacity from 8 gates at present to 18 after redevelopment.
The airport keeps its basic left-right arrangement: departures are on the left and arrivals on the right.
The future plan adds passenger services and replaces the walkway with a sky-train connection.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the task and identify the airport and planned timeframe.
Give an overview of the largest changes, especially the increase in gates and added facilities.
Describe the present terminal arrangement and its connection to the gates.
Explain the future concourse shape, new services and sky-train link.
End with a concise comparison of what stays similar and what changes.

Useful vocabulary & examples

gate capacity: The number of gates an airport can provide for passengers and aircraft.
The redevelopment will increase gate capacity from 8 to 18.
branch into two arms: To divide into two extending sections from a central point.
The future concourse will branch into two arms.
baggage-drop facilities: Places where passengers can hand over checked luggage.
Baggage-drop facilities are shown in the redeveloped terminal.
sky-train connection: A train link that transports passengers between airport areas.
A sky-train connection will serve the expanded gate area.

Task Prompt

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 9.0

The plans illustrate how reconstruction in the next year will change the appearance of Southwest Airport compared to its present condition. Overall, the total number of gates, as well as the departure and arrival areas, will be increased. New facilities such as car hire places, ATMs, shops, and sky trains will be introduced, and the central walkway will be replaced by a sky-train link. At present, the airport has a compact layout: the security and passport-control section lies between the terminal and a short passage leading to eight gates. The main building is divided into departures on the left and arrivals on the right, with a café and a limited range of other facilities. After redevelopment, this basic arrangement will remain, but the terminal and gate area will be substantially larger. The concourse will extend farther north and branch into two arms, with gates numbered 1 to 18. The departure and arrival sides will still occupy the left and right portions of the building, respectively, while security and passport control remain at the rear. The new plan also includes baggage-drop facilities, an ATM and car hire, and a sky train will connect the terminal with the expanded gate area. Overall, the main changes are greater capacity and more passenger facilities.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Check the diagram legend item by item before listing facilities; replace the unsupported reference to shops with the baggage-drop feature shown.

State the main numerical comparison explicitly: the plan increases the gates from 8 to 18.

Make the layout comparison more specific by describing the present short passage and the future two-armed gate concourse, rather than relying mainly on general claims about larger areas.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

9.0

Excellent

Words

210

Type

Process Diagram

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The overview identifies the central changes, especially that the gate total will increase, and the completed response correctly gives the change from 8 to 18 gates. It also describes the terminal layout and new services. However, “shops” is not supported by the visual, and the opening’s claim that the departure and arrival areas will increase is less precise than the clear expansion of the gate area. Next, verify each listed facility against the legend and prioritise the most visible changes.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.0 Band

The answer moves from an overview to the current layout and then to the redevelopment, using helpful transitions such as “At present” and “After redevelopment.” This gives the comparison a clear sequence. The phrase “and the central walkway” extends the opening list somewhat abruptly, though the later explanation helps clarify the change. For an even cleaner progression, group the existing layout and its future counterpart in matched sentences, then finish with the capacity increase.

Lexical Resource

6.5 Band

There is useful process-diagram language in phrases such as “branch into two arms,” “compact layout” and “expanded gate area.” The airport vocabulary is generally relevant, but “reconstruction” and “car hire places” are less natural choices in this context, and “shops” misidentifies a feature in the plan. Use concise terms such as “redevelopment,” “car-hire facilities” and “baggage-drop facilities,” while checking that each noun matches the visual.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.0 Band

The response uses a range of structures, including the contrast in “while security and passport control remain at the rear” and the relative clause “with gates numbered 1 to 18.” Most sentences are clear and controlled. The opening phrase “reconstruction in the next year” is awkward, and “the total number of gates, as well as the departure and arrival areas, will be increased” makes the comparison less direct. Prefer “redevelopment next year” and state the gate increase explicitly.

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