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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 8.0 Example

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Task 1

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The clearest overall change is the rise in gate capacity from 8 gates at present to 18 after redevelopment.
The airport keeps its basic left-right arrangement: departures are on the left and arrivals on the right.
The future plan adds passenger services and replaces the walkway with a sky-train connection.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the task and identify the airport and planned timeframe.
Give an overview of the largest changes, especially the increase in gates and added facilities.
Describe the present terminal arrangement and its connection to the gates.
Explain the future concourse shape, new services and sky-train link.
End with a concise comparison of what stays similar and what changes.

Useful vocabulary & examples

gate capacity: The number of gates an airport can provide for passengers and aircraft.
The redevelopment will increase gate capacity from 8 to 18.
branch into two arms: To divide into two extending sections from a central point.
The future concourse will branch into two arms.
baggage-drop facilities: Places where passengers can hand over checked luggage.
Baggage-drop facilities are shown in the redeveloped terminal.
sky-train connection: A train link that transports passengers between airport areas.
A sky-train connection will serve the expanded gate area.

Task Prompt

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Band 8.0

The plans provide details of a proposal for the one-year renovation of Southwest Airport. Overall, the main new features will be increasing the number of gates together with the addition of a range of new facilities. Entrance to the departure and arrival sections will largely go unaltered, although additional doors will be installed in both. At present, the airport has eight gates, with four on either side of a short central passage. After redevelopment, this gate area will extend into two longer arms serving 18 gates in total, divided equally between the two sides. This represents an increase of ten gates.

The main terminal will retain its basic layout: security and passport control will remain in the upper part of the building, while departures will be on the left and arrivals on the right. The plans also show extra entrance doors for both passenger areas. The range of services, however, will expand. Check-in and a café are included in the redeveloped terminal, alongside new bag-drop and ATM facilities. In addition, passengers will have access to a sky train and car-hire service, neither of which appears on the current plan. Overall, the project combines greater gate capacity with more passenger services while preserving the separation of departing and arriving passengers.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Clarify the timing in the opening: say that redevelopment is planned for next year, rather than describing it as a “one-year renovation.”

Make the overview more direct by stating the two headline changes together: gate numbers rise from eight to 18, and the terminal gains additional services.

When describing the diagrams, distinguish retained features from additions—for example, name the unchanged security/passport-control layout before listing the new bag drop, ATM, sky train, and car hire.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

8.0

Excellent

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Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.5 Band

The overview identifies the main changes, and the continuation gives the key comparison of eight gates now versus 18 after redevelopment, as well as the expanded facilities. It also notes that the passenger areas retain their left-right arrangement. One detail to refine is “one-year renovation,” which can suggest the work lasts a year rather than being planned for next year. State the timing more precisely.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.5 Band

The response moves from an overview to the current gate layout, then to the future plan and terminal services. Contrasts such as “At present” and “After redevelopment” help readers follow the changes, and the final sentence gives a clear summary. The original overview is somewhat crowded into one sentence. For an even smoother progression, separate the gate-capacity change from the points about doors and passenger facilities.

Lexical Resource

7.0 Band

The answer uses relevant terms such as “passport control,” “bag-drop,” and “car-hire service,” and the numerical comparison is expressed clearly as “an increase of ten gates.” The phrase “a range of new facilities” is broad, though the later details make its meaning clear. For greater precision, name the new services directly in the overview, then use specific terms consistently when describing their locations.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.5 Band

The continuation uses a useful mix of simple and complex structures, including “while departures will be on the left and arrivals on the right.” In the preserved opening, “will be increasing the number of gates together with the addition” is an awkward construction, and “Entrance to the departure and arrival sections” is less natural than a plural or collective reference. Recast the overview around “an increase” and “access” for cleaner phrasing.

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