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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 4.0 Example

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Task 1

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The clearest overall change is the rise in gate capacity from 8 gates at present to 18 after redevelopment.
The airport keeps its basic left-right arrangement: departures are on the left and arrivals on the right.
The future plan adds passenger services and replaces the walkway with a sky-train connection.

Suggested structure

Paraphrase the task and identify the airport and planned timeframe.
Give an overview of the largest changes, especially the increase in gates and added facilities.
Describe the present terminal arrangement and its connection to the gates.
Explain the future concourse shape, new services and sky-train link.
End with a concise comparison of what stays similar and what changes.

Useful vocabulary & examples

gate capacity: The number of gates an airport can provide for passengers and aircraft.
The redevelopment will increase gate capacity from 8 to 18.
branch into two arms: To divide into two extending sections from a central point.
The future concourse will branch into two arms.
baggage-drop facilities: Places where passengers can hand over checked luggage.
Baggage-drop facilities are shown in the redeveloped terminal.
sky-train connection: A train link that transports passengers between airport areas.
A sky-train connection will serve the expanded gate area.

Task Prompt

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

User Essay Analysis

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Band 4.0

So this is the final plan for the redevelopment for our airport. The main new features includes an increase in number of the gates that will pass from 8 to 18, so the number of possible fligths and the amount of travellers crossing the airport willbe doubled. To assist all the travellers during the wait and make the terminal more convenient, the redeveloped airport will also include several facilities. The number of gates rises from 8 to 18, with the new gates arranged along two extended branches at the end of the central concourse. The concourse remains connected to the main terminal, where departures are on the left and arrivals are on the right. Security and passport-control areas are still near the departure side, while passport control and customs remain on the arrivals side.

The range of passenger services is also expanded. A bag-drop area is added, and the new plan includes an ATM and a car-hire facility. A cafe is shown in both plans, while a sky train is introduced along the central route. Check-in facilities are retained. Overall, the redevelopment chiefly increases the number of gates and adds services, although the diagrams do not give figures for passenger numbers or flights.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Use a short overview to state the two largest changes: the increase from 8 to 18 gates and the addition of passenger facilities.

Do not claim that flights or passenger numbers will double; the diagram provides no figures for either.

Proofread the first paragraph specifically for subject–verb agreement, articles, spelling and spaces between words.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

4.0

Modest

Words

203

Type

Process Diagram

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

4.5 Band

The answer selects important changes, including the increase from “8 to 18” gates and the addition of a “sky train,” bag drop, ATM and car hire. However, it claims that flights and passenger numbers “willbe doubled,” which the plans do not show; the gate increase is also not a doubling. The final caveat partly recognises this evidence gap. Next, report only visible changes and avoid inferring passenger or flight totals.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5 Band

The response moves from the gate increase to terminal layout and then to passenger services, and the contrast between “departures” on the left and “arrivals” on the right helps orient the reader. However, the opening repeats the gate increase in the next paragraph, and “To assist all the travellers during the wait” does not connect smoothly to the following information. Group each change once and use a clear overview before the details.

Lexical Resource

4.0 Band

Task-relevant terms such as “bag-drop area,” “car-hire facility” and “central concourse” help describe the redevelopment specifically. Some word choices and forms are imprecise, including “the amount of travellers” and “gates that will pass.” Spelling in “fligths” also weakens clarity. Use “number” with countable people, and choose precise process language such as “the gate count will rise” or “the gates will be added.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.0 Band

The answer attempts longer sentences to explain changes, but several basic errors reduce accuracy. In “The main new features includes,” the plural subject does not agree with the verb; “willbe” is incorrectly joined, and “increase in number of the gates” lacks natural article use. Revise each sentence for subject–verb agreement, articles and spacing before adding complex clauses, then proofread spelling and countable nouns.

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