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Writing Academic Task 2 Band 4.0 Example

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291 words AcademicTask 2
Task 2

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Ideas to explore

  • Parents shape social values through repeated everyday examples and guidance tailored to a child’s behaviour.
  • Schools let children practise cooperation, conflict resolution and respect among peers with different perspectives.
  • A balanced argument can assign parents the primary role while explaining how schools reinforce and extend lessons from home.

Suggested structure

  1. Introduce the debate and state your position clearly.
  2. Explain the case for parents, supported by a specific example of modelling or guidance.
  3. Explain what schools contribute through peer interaction and structured learning.
  4. Give your judgement on which role is primary and why.
  5. Conclude by showing how cooperation between families and schools benefits children.
Useful vocabulary & examples
lead by example
to teach or influence others through one’s own behaviour

Parents can teach respect by leading by example in their everyday interactions.

resolve conflicts
to settle disagreements constructively

Group activities give pupils opportunities to resolve conflicts with their peers.

civic responsibility
the duties and conduct expected of people in a community

Teachers can introduce civic responsibility by discussing fairness and shared rules.

reinforce consistent standards
to strengthen shared expectations by applying them reliably

Families and teachers can reinforce consistent standards for respectful behaviour.

Task Prompt

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Band 4.0

Some people argue that parents are responsible for making their children have good social skills. Meanwhile, the others have an opinion that the children will learn how to be ready to socialize in public. We will discuss both statements in this article. We all know that family is an important part which can affect social life of children. Parents are with children from small age and they can teach them respect, sharing, and how to speak with other people. For example, when parents listen to their child and explain why they should not hurt someone, children can understand good behaviour. Also, children copy what parents do, so good example is very important.

On the other hand, school is also a place where children meet many people who are different. They have to work in groups and follow rules with classmates and teachers. This can help them learn to wait, solve small problems and communicate outside the family. Teachers also have experience and can explain how everyone should be treated equally. However, some children may not listen to a teacher, and school cannot teach every child individually.

In my opinion, parents have the first responsibility because children learn early habits at home. But school is also important because children practise their social skills with others. If parents and school work together, children can become more responsible and kind members of society. For instance, parents can talk with teachers when a child has problems with classmates and encourage the child to solve it politely.

To conclude, both parents and schools can teach children to behave well in society. Parents give early guidance and schools provide experience with other people. I believe that both are needed, but parents should start this teaching at home.

Targeted Improvement Tips

1
State your own view in the introduction, for example, that parents provide early guidance while schools give children practice with peers.
2
Develop each body paragraph with a clear claim, an explanation of the social skill involved, and one relevant example.
3
Proofread specifically for natural collocations and grammar: check phrases such as “from an early age,” articles before singular nouns, and pronouns that refer clearly to a person or group.

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