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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Describe the overall shift from scientific research to tourism before listing individual map features.
Compare what stayed the same (the pier, beach, natural spring and rocks) with what was added or replaced.
Group details by location: the western pier and beach, the central hotel and leisure facilities, and the eastern spring, rocks and lookout.

Suggested structure

Introduce what the two maps compare.
Give an overview of the island’s main change and any notable features that remain.
Describe the past layout, moving from west to east.
Describe the present layout in the same order and compare new facilities with former features.

Useful vocabulary & examples

be transformed into: to change substantially into a different kind of place or thing
Paradise Island has been transformed into a popular tourist destination.
remain in place: to continue to exist in the same location
The natural spring and the rocks remain in place on the eastern side.
be replaced by: to give way to something new in the same position or role
The small boat was replaced by a cruise ship.
inland from: away from the coast and towards the interior
The hotel complex is located inland from the beach.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the condition of paradise island in the past and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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Band 7.0

The provided maps represent how the paradise island changed over a period of time. As can be seen clearly, Paradise Island has changed a lot until now. It seems that Paradise Island at present is for relaxing and vacation whereas in the past it was a silent place. According to the first map, which shows the island in the past, the area contained a beach in the northwest, a pier and boat access on the western side, and a scientific research station nearby. Several groups of palm trees occupied the middle of the island, while a natural spring and rocks were located in the east and northeast, respectively. In the present map, the research station and many palm trees have been replaced by tourist facilities. These include a hotel complex with a swimming pool, an open restaurant, a BBQ area and a cafe. A scenic lookout and cycle path have also been added, and visitors can arrive by cruise ship. The beach remains in the northwest and is designated for swimming, while the pier remains on the west. The natural spring and rocks are also still shown. Overall, the island has been developed for tourism and recreation, while retaining some of its original features.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the first two general sentences with one overview that contrasts the island’s past research and natural features with its present leisure facilities.

Group features by location when describing each map: for example, mention the western pier and boat or cruise access together, then describe the central and eastern features.

Proofread the opening for natural time expressions and parallel forms; check phrases such as “over time” and “relaxation and holidays.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

204

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Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

6.5 Band

The completed response covers the main transformation from a research-focused, lightly developed island to a leisure destination, naming features such as “a scientific research station” and “a hotel complex with a swimming pool.” It also notes retained features, including the beach, pier, spring and rocks. The opening calls the past “a silent place,” which is broad and slightly imprecise. Next, make the overall comparison more direct and prioritise the major changes before listing smaller facilities.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.5 Band

The response moves from a general overview to the past map, then the present map, and finishes with a summary, so the reader can follow the comparison. The sequence from “According to the first map” to “In the present map” is especially clear. However, the opening repeats the idea of change in two consecutive sentences. You could improve the flow by combining those sentences into one concise overview, then keeping the past-to-present structure.

Lexical Resource

6.0 Band

The answer uses relevant map vocabulary, including “scenic lookout,” “natural spring,” “pier” and “cycle path,” and accurately identifies the facilities. Some wording in the preserved opening is less natural: “changed a lot until now” and “is for relaxing and vacation.” These phrases make the introduction less precise than the later description. Replace them with concise expressions such as “has changed considerably” and “is now geared towards tourism and recreation.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

6.0 Band

The later description uses several accurate sentence patterns, including the contrast in “while a natural spring and rocks were located in the east and northeast, respectively.” The opening contains less natural grammatical choices in “has changed a lot until now” and “is for relaxing and vacation,” and it omits a comma before “whereas.” Review time expressions and parallel phrasing, then proofread punctuation around clauses that contrast past and present.

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