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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 5.0 Example

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Task 1

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Ideas to explore

Describe the overall shift from scientific research to tourism before listing individual map features.
Compare what stayed the same (the pier, beach, natural spring and rocks) with what was added or replaced.
Group details by location: the western pier and beach, the central hotel and leisure facilities, and the eastern spring, rocks and lookout.

Suggested structure

Introduce what the two maps compare.
Give an overview of the island’s main change and any notable features that remain.
Describe the past layout, moving from west to east.
Describe the present layout in the same order and compare new facilities with former features.

Useful vocabulary & examples

be transformed into: to change substantially into a different kind of place or thing
Paradise Island has been transformed into a popular tourist destination.
remain in place: to continue to exist in the same location
The natural spring and the rocks remain in place on the eastern side.
be replaced by: to give way to something new in the same position or role
The small boat was replaced by a cruise ship.
inland from: away from the coast and towards the interior
The hotel complex is located inland from the beach.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the condition of paradise island in the past and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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Band 5.0

The given diagrams illustrate the significant changes and progress that has taken place in paradise island over a course of time. Overall, the island has gone through a lot of major changes and a substantial amount of development has taken place on the island which can be seen as the infrastructure and amenities of the island. In the past, Paradise Island had a beach, a pier and a small boat near the shore. There were also a scientific research station, several palm trees, rocks and a natural spring, while most of the land was undeveloped. In the present diagram, the beach remains and swimming is permitted there. However, many new facilities have been built. A swimming pool and hotel complex are located near the centre, with an open restaurant and a cafe nearby. A cycle path goes around much of the island, and a BBQ area has been added on the eastern side. There is also a scenic lookout close to the rocks and spring. At the coast, the original pier remains, but a cruise ship is now shown beside it instead of the small boat. The scientific station and palm trees are no longer shown. Overall, the island has changed from a quiet, mostly natural place into a developed destination for visitors, although the sea, beach, rocks and spring remain.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Write a one-sentence overview that contrasts the island’s mostly natural past with its developed present, then name the key features that remain.

Group the new facilities by location—for example, central accommodation and pool, eastern dining and BBQ facilities, and the perimeter path and lookout—rather than listing them in an unstructured sequence.

Proofread the opening for agreement and concision: check compound subjects, remove repeated ideas, and use standard time phrases such as “over time.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

5.0

Modest

Words

221

Type

Process Diagram

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.5 Band

The answer identifies the broad contrast between the earlier natural setting and the present visitor facilities, and it notes that the beach, rocks and spring remain. Details such as “a swimming pool and hotel complex” and “a cruise ship” are relevant to the diagram. The opening overview is hard to interpret, however, and the comparison could be more systematically grouped by what was retained, removed and added. Next, make that contrast explicit in the overview.

Coherence & Cohesion

5.5 Band

The response follows a workable sequence: overview, past features, present additions and a concluding comparison. Phrases including “In the past” and “In the present diagram” help the reader follow the time shift. However, the two overview sentences repeat “changes” and “development,” and the location details are not consistently organised. Use one concise overview, then compare retained features before describing the new facilities in grouped areas.

Lexical Resource

5.0 Band

The answer uses relevant diagram vocabulary, including “scientific research station,” “natural spring,” “scenic lookout” and “cycle path,” so readers can identify many features. Some wording is repetitive or imprecise: “a lot of major changes” is informal and overlaps with “a substantial amount of development.” Replace these with specific terms such as “tourist facilities” or “visitor infrastructure,” and use “over time” rather than the less natural “over a course of time.”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

4.5 Band

There are several clear, mostly simple sentences, including “A cycle path goes around much of the island,” and the present-tense descriptions are generally understandable. Errors in the opening—“changes and progress that has taken place” and “over a course of time”—reduce accuracy; the long overview sentence also makes the relationship between ideas unclear. Check subject–verb agreement and article use, then divide long sentences so each comparison has one clear main idea.

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