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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 7.0 Example

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Task 1

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Describe the overall shift from scientific research to tourism before listing individual map features.
Compare what stayed the same (the pier, beach, natural spring and rocks) with what was added or replaced.
Group details by location: the western pier and beach, the central hotel and leisure facilities, and the eastern spring, rocks and lookout.

Suggested structure

Introduce what the two maps compare.
Give an overview of the island’s main change and any notable features that remain.
Describe the past layout, moving from west to east.
Describe the present layout in the same order and compare new facilities with former features.

Useful vocabulary & examples

be transformed into: to change substantially into a different kind of place or thing
Paradise Island has been transformed into a popular tourist destination.
remain in place: to continue to exist in the same location
The natural spring and the rocks remain in place on the eastern side.
be replaced by: to give way to something new in the same position or role
The small boat was replaced by a cruise ship.
inland from: away from the coast and towards the interior
The hotel complex is located inland from the beach.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the condition of paradise island in the past and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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Band 7.0

The picture describes development on an island, namely Paradise. Overall, the land underwent significant change with the construction of some tourist facilities. Strikingly, the island’s growth was accompanied by the emergence of trees and natural spring. Regarding the left side of the map. The Scientific Research Station was demolished to make way for the Hotel complex, which occupies the central-western part of the island. The former boat has been replaced by a cruise ship beside the pier, while the beach remains and is now designated for swimming. The natural spring and the rocks are still present, although the trees shown across the island in the past are no longer depicted.

Several facilities have been added for visitors. A swimming pool lies just north of the hotel, and an open restaurant is situated to its east. Farther east, visitors can find a BBQ area and a café. A cycle path connects the developed area with a scenic lookout on the eastern side, following a route around much of the island. Overall, the island has shifted from research and nature to tourism. While the spring and coastal landmarks have been retained, the research facility and vegetation have given way to tourism infrastructure.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Before drafting, list which features are retained, removed or added: for example, the natural spring and rocks remain, trees and the research station are absent from the present map, and visitor facilities are added.

Organise the body by comparison: first describe the western area and replacement of the boat, then cover the hotel, dining facilities, cycle path and lookout.

After writing, check every sentence beginning with a linking phrase such as “Regarding” to ensure it has a complete main clause; also check articles in phrases such as “a natural spring.”

AI Feedback

Overall Band

7.0

Good

Words

200

Type

Process Diagram

Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

5.5 Band

The answer identifies the main shift to tourism and includes several accurate present-day features, such as the hotel, pool, restaurant and cycle path. However, the statement that development brought “the emergence of trees and natural spring” conflicts with the maps: the spring is shown in both periods, while trees appear only in the past. For a more complete comparison, distinguish retained features from those removed and verify each change against both maps.

Coherence & Cohesion

6.0 Band

The response moves from an overview to western-side changes and then added visitor facilities, giving it a broadly logical progression. The phrase “Regarding the left side of the map.” interrupts that flow because it is an incomplete introductory phrase standing alone. Group the past-to-present comparisons together, then describe the new facilities by location; use a clear topic sentence for each paragraph.

Lexical Resource

6.5 Band

There is useful task-specific vocabulary in “demolished,” “designated for swimming,” and “scenic lookout,” and these terms help describe the transformation precisely. Some wording is less accurate or natural, particularly “emergence of trees and natural spring,” which also misreports the diagram. Choose neutral comparison language such as “remained,” “was replaced by,” and “was added,” matching each verb to the map evidence.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

5.5 Band

The answer uses a range of clause patterns, including “although the trees shown across the island…” and “while the beach remains…”. Accuracy is weakened by “Regarding the left side of the map.” as a fragment and by the missing article in “natural spring.” The capitalised “Hotel” is also unnecessary for a common facility. Practise complete introductory clauses and check articles and capitalisation during proofreading.

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