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Writing Academic Task 1 Band 8.0 Example

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Task 1

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Describe the overall shift from scientific research to tourism before listing individual map features.
Compare what stayed the same (the pier, beach, natural spring and rocks) with what was added or replaced.
Group details by location: the western pier and beach, the central hotel and leisure facilities, and the eastern spring, rocks and lookout.

Suggested structure

Introduce what the two maps compare.
Give an overview of the island’s main change and any notable features that remain.
Describe the past layout, moving from west to east.
Describe the present layout in the same order and compare new facilities with former features.

Useful vocabulary & examples

be transformed into: to change substantially into a different kind of place or thing
Paradise Island has been transformed into a popular tourist destination.
remain in place: to continue to exist in the same location
The natural spring and the rocks remain in place on the eastern side.
be replaced by: to give way to something new in the same position or role
The small boat was replaced by a cruise ship.
inland from: away from the coast and towards the interior
The hotel complex is located inland from the beach.

Task Prompt

The diagram below show the condition of paradise island in the past and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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Band 8.0

The maps indicate the changes to Paradise Island in the past and in the present. Overall, the period observed many major changes to the island. From just being used for scientific research, the island developed into a modern resort complex with many recreational and commercial features being put up. In the past, the island consisted of a small scientific research station, a pier and a boat on the western side, with a beach just to the northwest. Several palm trees occupied the central area, while a natural spring and a group of rocks were located in the east. In the present, the research station and boat are no longer shown, and a cruise ship is positioned beside the pier. The beach remains, and swimming is now permitted there. A hotel complex and swimming pool have been added in the central-western area, replacing the former open space and palm trees. To the east, visitors can find an open restaurant, a BBQ area and a café. A cycle path leads towards a scenic lookout near the rocks, while the natural spring and rocks appear to remain. Thus, it has changed from a small research location into a resort offering accommodation, dining and leisure facilities.

Targeted Improvement Tips

Replace the overview’s “the period observed” construction with a sentence whose subject is the island, then summarise the shift from research use to tourism.

Organise the details by location: describe the western beach and pier, the central hotel and pool, and the eastern spring, dining facilities and lookout.

Use explicit comparison verbs—“remained,” “was removed,” and “was added”—and check that each verb matches what the maps actually show.

AI Feedback

Overall Band

8.0

Excellent

Words

202

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Criteria Breakdown

Task Achievement

7.5 Band

The overview identifies the main transition in “the island developed into a modern resort complex,” and the response covers key past and present features, including the research station, pool, restaurant and lookout. It also notes retained features such as the beach and spring. A limitation is that “replacing the former open space and palm trees” makes the change sound more definite than the map alone establishes. Next, describe locations and additions neutrally, and distinguish clearly between features retained, removed and added.

Coherence & Cohesion

7.5 Band

The answer moves from an overall summary to past features and then present-day changes, so the reader can follow the comparison. The sequence from the western side to the east in “To the east” also helps orient the details. However, some relationships between features are conveyed through lists rather than direct comparisons. For a clearer map-based account, group details by area or pair each major past feature with its present counterpart.

Lexical Resource

7.0 Band

Task-relevant terms such as “natural spring,” “scenic lookout” and “cycle path” make the description specific, while “retained” is useful for describing continuity. Some wording is less precise or natural: “the period observed many major changes” and “features being put up” are awkward choices for a map report. Use verbs such as “underwent,” “was added” and “remained,” and prefer “facilities” to the broad “features” when describing resort amenities.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

7.0 Band

The response uses a range of structures, including the contrast in “while a natural spring and a group of rocks were located in the east” and present perfect forms such as “have been added.” Most sentences are easy to understand. The main weakness is the subject choice in “the period observed many major changes,” which makes the sentence illogical, while “From just being used” is an awkward opening construction. Make the island the subject of the overview and use direct past-versus-present clauses.

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